| Re: Bread and blackthorns by Caducus |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/9:55 AM |
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"Imprisoned from my ribs"?
I'm sure you have an explanation why you used "from" rather than "in" or "by". I'll save you the trouble. It doesn't work.
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/9:34 AM |
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There's no easy way to say this: I think it doesn't work.
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| Re: a comment on not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/9:32 AM |
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I'll tell you, most people are going to think Val Kilmer in Tombstone saying "Ah'm your huckleberry."
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| Re: a comment on not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee |
ay deee 204.90.50.252 |
14-Nov-05/8:56 AM |
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engaged in, causing, or encouraging the consumption of food, materials, or goods, especially in a wasteful or destructive way
that's pretty close, especially: materials, destructive
not speaking of tuberculosis
it is a great word, thank you
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| Re: a comment on Abba by oneglove |
oneglove 24.171.9.144 |
14-Nov-05/7:45 AM |
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
oneglove 24.171.9.144 |
14-Nov-05/7:44 AM |
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
oneglove 24.171.9.144 |
14-Nov-05/7:44 AM |
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i know what the other version is, i thought i'd make it my own
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| Re: Headlines by Dovina |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
14-Nov-05/5:44 AM |
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| Re: The Hawk by Dovina |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
14-Nov-05/5:39 AM |
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Great imagery in the 3rd stanza, otherwise, I found it difficult to follow, breaking from rhyme quite often without needing to.
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| Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/5:39 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/3:58 AM |
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Yes, but as a nonbeliever, it doesn't count if I say it.
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| Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/3:57 AM |
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/3:56 AM |
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The funny thing is "the face that launched a thousand ships" wasn't a cliche until some better poet made it up. Namely, this one: http://www.osmond-riba.org/lis/Graphics/Marlowe1.jpg
Actually, that's not so funny.
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| Re: Abba by oneglove |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/3:53 AM |
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As if you needed proof of God's existence, the first initials of the band members in ABBA (Abagail, Brian, Bjorn, and Agatha) actually spell ABBA.
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| Re: a comment on Headlines by Dovina |
zodiac 217.144.7.195 |
14-Nov-05/3:51 AM |
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I told you, my profession is doing something everybody thinks anybody who has any emotion can do perfectly. Ironically, by actually learning how to do it, I've totally lost my capacity for emotion.
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| Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
14-Nov-05/2:59 AM |
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Just like a teacher to ask questions you already know the answers to.
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
14-Nov-05/2:49 AM |
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Then say "true north". The smart ones among us will figure out you mean true love. If you're going to plagiarize then at least say it right, "the FACE that launched a thousand ships". Although decently worded your poem is awash with cliche after cliche.
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| Re: a comment on the battle for troy by oneglove |
oneglove 24.171.9.144 |
14-Nov-05/12:28 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Abba by oneglove |
oneglove 24.171.9.144 |
13-Nov-05/11:24 PM |
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words of advice that dont make sense at the time can stay with us until years later when it finally becomes clear and can help guide us. i felt like there needed to be a break somewhere in the poem and that felt like the best place.
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| Re: Us Sinners by BrandonW |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
13-Nov-05/9:22 PM |
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You know where you are?
You're in the Jungle, baby.
You're gonna diiiieya.
Haiku by Axl Rose
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