Re: Photograph by <~>	Caducus 172.213.134.2	12-Jan-06/9:20 AM
From my loft i found all my pictures and schoolwork from near age zero and reading this the day after prologed the feeling of '5' ....Line 3 was mine once too.
Re: the sky chooses blue by <~>	Caducus 172.213.134.2	12-Jan-06/9:18 AM
love kneescrape clarity - prayer like. Clarity.
Re: a comment on What Matters by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	12-Jan-06/9:14 AM
Bright-eyes-flanked-his-chin, ten-der-smile-a-bove-his-nose. I-knew-he-loved-me.
Re: What Matters by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	12-Jan-06/8:39 AM
Excuse me, but spell out the 17 syllables here. Am I losing something. I still find it confusing figuring out a Haiku. 5-7-5?
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Jan-06/8:13 AM
I guess if you consider cheating, not playing. It's funny how Hawking talks about knowing the mind of God in his book. As if he's secretly giving Christians and Jews the finger. That's probably why God turned him into a cauliflower. Of course if he was the smartest man in the world he would have known that the smartest way to respond to the question "Does God Exist?" is to say "God who?"
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	12-Jan-06/6:32 AM
Then he just pretends to play dice? Now that's something. I watched an interview with Edward Witten once. He was introduced as 'the smartest man on earth'. It was fascinating - I didn't understand a word he said. Hawking was fascinating too - when presented with the question: "Does God Exist?", he grinned, moved his two fingers and out came the mechanical voice: "no".
Re: a comment on Flow by zodiac	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	12-Jan-06/6:19 AM
Where did your reply go? Anyway, it's not that I have a problem with 'she dreams' (although doing dreams in poetry I find very tricky) or 'she thinks', but with the order in which you use them here - or does she think in her dream? Sorry for not making myself clear. Also I didn't mean to just pull out 'this is'. If you pull out a word from a good poem, the whole thing changes.
Re: cat by Dental Panic	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	12-Jan-06/5:21 AM
Well said. Maybe God does play dice but I think he cheats a little.
Re: a comment on Suck by MacFrantic	MacFrantic 172.185.4.192	11-Jan-06/10:19 PM
that's my comment, sorry.
Re: a comment on Suck by MacFrantic	Enkidu 172.185.4.192	11-Jan-06/10:14 PM
yes, a ghost who has disguised herself as alive to make me calm
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	zodiac 209.193.18.100	11-Jan-06/9:35 PM
The latest victim of the multiple self-voting bug. So sad, Caducus. So sad.
Re: Birmingham gardens by INTRANSIT	ecargo 172.142.12.67	11-Jan-06/8:08 PM
Late to the party (as always--just ask <~>, and I brought nasty cookies too). Some nice details here--really like "the specific gravity of my footsteps"; "to be like moss"; "fanning pinecones." Going to join the "joking oak" naysayers though (for what it's worth). Nice work--good luck with the submission.
Re: a comment on the man with the red pendant by pollywolly	zodiac 209.193.18.100	11-Jan-06/5:04 PM
Hey, I'm sorry. Come around more.
Re: Flow by zodiac	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	11-Jan-06/3:47 PM
Recently I had a debate with someone over the use of 'this (is)' in a poem. I always wonder what happens when you pull it out - because there's always something happening. To me 'this (is)' is like a pointing finger, it's outside of the poem. The other party didn't agree. To him it was something he used frequently, without any objections. He liked the rhythm of it, and the decisiveness. I think he would have used your poem to prove his point. But maybe I would have too. I've got a problem with 'she dreams'/'she thinks'.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	11-Jan-06/3:24 PM
Thanks very much.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	zodiac 209.193.18.100	11-Jan-06/3:16 PM
Oops. I don't mean that to sound like your poems aren't good, just that this one is great.
Re: cat by Dental Panic	zodiac 209.193.18.100	11-Jan-06/3:15 PM
Fabulous. This poem should be best on poemranker. It's your best, certainly. Eminently publishable, Dental.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	11-Jan-06/3:10 PM
You should try 'Epiphany' by David Hewson then.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	11-Jan-06/3:08 PM
Well - it originally was intended to be a poem about..anyway, it slipped off track and I ended up with this, don't know what to think of it. I like it and I don't like it.
Re: a comment on the man with the red pendant by pollywolly	pollywolly 62.30.170.78	11-Jan-06/2:43 PM
thank you for your comments, much appreciated