Re: Jailbird by zodiac	ecargo 167.219.0.143	17-Jan-06/1:45 PM
You've got such a great "eye" for details. This is good. I bet it'll end up even better. Was the repeat of "redecorated" deliberate? Jails are seldom on main streets (other than holding cells in police stations)--even county jails are behind gates and wires and fences, so there'd be no storefronts, generally, and no sidewalks to pace. Am I taking this way more literally than you mean it? I sometimes do that; miss the metaphor.
Re: a comment on Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	ecargo 167.219.0.143	17-Jan-06/1:37 PM
Yeah, I tried to do that and ended up with "lithe acolyte of spring," for chrissakes. Think I'll just slink along.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/1:08 PM
My birthday is coming up. Could you migrate that lovely sentiment into a card with red roses, the velvet kind that fuzz up from the surface and feel clean-shaven to the cheek. And dark chocolate is quite appropriate.
Re: Where the Hell Did I Put My Glasses? by Joe-joe	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/1:07 PM
Fastened to a desk in an old unused trailer a pen and paper cup read like memoirs, bound there by concoction of sugar and ten-year-old coffee. Written by unsteady hands on an old keyboard, and rummaged files for lost reports, thumbed frantically the company phone listing - hands that no longer toil for an annual wage but steadily hold the daily tabloid at arms length. just a suggestion.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/12:15 PM
Don't - but blame readers, not publishers. That's harder, isn't it? Readers are like us. What are you reading now?
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/12:06 PM
You have the most lovely and delightful weirdness about you. Absolutely legendary.
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:57 AM
Make the flow of both stanzas more consistant with each other.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/11:57 AM
Yes, there you have it - good one, lol. Take the general lousiness of the world and return it as a gift: of ugliness and angst or sadness, but just perhaps, of beauty too.
Re: a comment on Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:54 AM
Ace. Another bunny pulled from your hat.
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:49 AM
My crap's not gold but my pee is. Close enough to alchemy I guess.
Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:44 AM
"Tell me more, tell me more, that you don't got her preg Tell me more, tell me more, cause he sounds like a drag" -Grease
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/11:29 AM
Have you transmuted an experiential dross into gold as every professor of alchemy, on occasion, should?
Re: a comment on angst of the saints by calliope	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:25 AM
Yes calliope, so write lots of crap like Grisham, King, and Rice and watch the money roll in.
Re: The Epitaph by vulcan	Dovina 69.175.32.104	17-Jan-06/11:23 AM
The first three lines don't quite make sense. As it progresses, it gets better.
Re: regret by FreeFormFixation	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	17-Jan-06/11:19 AM
I get mixed race children out of it. It's nice whether it's read slow or fast. Have you seen the new Kanye West video?
Re: regret by FreeFormFixation	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/10:43 AM
"Integration" and your children makes this about schools' racial integration. The rest makes it about not letting go of the '20s. I know what you're saying. "Integration" is what needs to go.
Re: angst of the saints by calliope	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/10:39 AM
A publisher's eye is defined by what sells. That is, what people buy, what they like. Don't make it publishers' fault.
Re: a comment on My Reason by PoeticXTC	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/10:36 AM
An emotional piece of writing: "For sale: Baby shoes, never used." - Hemmingway Creating or representing emotion in writing usually has very little to do with yelling and emphasis. Drop the caps. Add some emotion.
Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/10:33 AM
1Tell 2me 3more, 4tell 5me 6more 1A 2hai 3ku's 4some 5thing 6I 7don't 8know. 1A 2-5 3-7 4-5 5or 6so? Nice. A good commentary on the limitations of haiku-length.
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	zodiac 209.193.14.154	17-Jan-06/10:28 AM
On a Friends rerun I saw last night, there's a morbid zoo custodian who addresses an opossum as "enigma of the trees, upside-down denizen of the night." This reminded me of that a little.