Re: a comment on Conflict Resolution by Dovina	Dovina 69.175.32.104	21-Feb-06/1:03 PM
Yes, that is useful. But actually, the anvil is a very bad idea, and I hereby renounce the thing. First, nobody pounds on an anvil with a hammer. They pound on something held against an anvil for support. Second, when I say “the anvil” then some specific anvil is implied, and it needs explaining. Third, if I say “like hammer blows on an anvil,” it sounds awful. Your interpretation of the anvil - her hard-shell of unconfidence, a thing that bounces the words back, deflected by her stubbornness – these are the kinds of things I meant. Now it reads: I wanted her to understand, but words only clanked like hammer blows.
Re: a comment on Everything That You've Ever Wanted by drnick	drnick 24.176.22.254	21-Feb-06/12:41 PM
Yes, I suppose you are right about line 10. The last line is the whole purpose of the poem; that in the hypothetical world, where you have everything you've ever wanted, you would find your existance boring and predictable and thus not worth living. True satisfaction is not something the human mind is able to achieve in this way.
Re: a comment on Watercolor Fairy by Scarlett	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/11:01 AM
Yes, "jostle" is better. And leave "a" out completely... Glad you liked the imagery. I love to paint with watercolors but you never know what it truly is going to look like till the next day, because it dries 20% lighter.. used to laugh and say that I had to wait for the watercolor fairy - hence the poem. Thank you, Ranger, for your suggestions.
Re: Watercolor Fairy by Scarlett	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/8:18 AM
Nice, made me think of the children's story about the elves and the shoemaker, I think. It was a shoemaker, wasn't it? Anyway. Not only do I see the fairy in this dancing round the picture, I also see the artist doing the same during the day - Tesa could easily be a small child as well, giving the picture the sort of imagination that only childhood can (does that make sense?) I love the idea of hues battling for territory, although I'm not sure that 'battle' fits the feel of this piece - maybe something like 'jostle' would work better? Also I'd change 'a dew' to 'like dew' - or even just get leave out 'a'. You get the imagery spot on here.
Re: a comment on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/8:07 AM
Thanks for your encouragement, Ranger.
Re: A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/8:05 AM
I'm sure I'm off base on this, especially given the comments following the poem. But it seems to me that these are children throughout the entire poem. She made a daisy chain, ah ~ that is sweet. I remember making flowers into necklaces when I was a young girl... but enough of that - brought back a lovely memory, 'tis all. The marriage in the swamp is something children "play" at - playing house type of thing came to mind. The headscarf - immediately made me think of cancer. Too many young face this and other children don't understand, they fear what's different... The ache in the end, that she passed away ~ forever cherished, just as the chain is unending. Well, that's my ramblings...
Re: The chestnut by richa	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/7:55 AM
Man...images of a flagon full of absynthe (my spelling of it, not necessarily right though)...you have one iron liver...
Re: a comment on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/7:47 AM
Yeah, on your poems you can delete any comment you like, elsewhere you can delete your own. Take the chance, you seem like the sort of person who can read criticism without taking offence (unlike a 16 year-old Ranger when he first joined poemranker...) - I promise you will get a lot out of this site!
Re: Eden to Galillee (by Caducus) by Mona Lisa	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/7:42 AM
You haven't really pinched this from Caducus have you? He's written far too much for me to check.
Re: a comment on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/7:41 AM
Whoops... I sure did hit the red "x". Thank you for explaining what happened. Lol. I didn't realize I could delete someone else's response. See there, learn something new every day. I hate to disappoint, Ranger and the rest of my stuff is sad in comparison. But mayhap I'll take a chance. Enjoying the site thus far!
Re: a comment on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/7:40 AM
I must say that the play in the title 'Sunday/someday' just hit me. I need to be a bit less tired when reading Caducus' works. In fact, I think I need to be less tired when reading anyone's works!
Re: a comment on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/7:37 AM
I think you deleted my comment, if by accident then I don't know if anyone's told you that the red 'x' is the delete button, to reply click 'reply' (this sentence doesn't even remotely make grammatical sense...). If you know that already, disregard this poem. I've just seen a lot of people do it by mistake. Post some of your other stuff anyway. People here will always give advice - and take it from me that the experience you get from this site will improve your poetry immeasurably. I had to take a 2 and a half year break from writing to get things right and recover from writer's block, all of a sudden things are starting to fall into place. And if you've written something as good as this, you will write something just as good - if not better - in the future. Welcome to poemranker!
Re: Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/7:35 AM
Whew.... the images that flood from this poem are impressive. The pain of a love lost has been penned before but this was unique. Thoroughly enjoyed.
Re: Tulips and Roses by Mona Lisa	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/7:27 AM
The beginning is lovely, makes me feel that this is a muse to you. An untouchable image of passion and the dream the desires to bloom in what "could have been." There is a break though, when the dream begins. This doesn't flow together as smoothly. Don't give up on this one!
Re: Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	21-Feb-06/7:18 AM
Sadly, this is the best of my work and for there on out - it's all down hill. Lol.. In the meantime, while my muse sleeps beneath a morning glory bloom, I'll browse around.
Re: a comment on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	21-Feb-06/6:50 AM
Don't sell yourself short. I've been quite amazed with the things you've picked up in my poems that most others didn't and you've been much more consistant than me when it comes to nailing the meanings of other posts.
Re: a comment on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	Caducus 172.202.26.25	21-Feb-06/6:49 AM
Thanks. Alchemy is pretty much on the button with his/her interpretation. I wrote it attempting a duality of death being death, or the end of any relationship for whatever reason. I realized where my strengths and weaknesses lay and awareness helped me do my thing the best to my ability. It could actually do without the last stanza, i never know when to bow out but the ending of a poem in my opinion is key for people giving a shit. Antony
Re: a comment on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	21-Feb-06/6:46 AM
I knew I should have learned how to read poetry. Looking back over it with your interpretation gave me goosebumps. As such, ignore my first comment, Caducus. This is awesome.
Re: Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	21-Feb-06/6:42 AM
Great love story.
Re: a comment on Sunday i will dream again by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	21-Feb-06/6:40 AM
Here's what I got. A man(perhaps an old man) decides to welcome back into his life the God that he once scorned and rejected for taking his lover(wife) away from him in the desperate hope that someday that God might reunite them. Shoulder war: Chip on his shoulder maybe. 2nd stanza: He relizes he is bound to die. 3rd stanza: He embraces the idea of dying. 4th stanza: Getting older and closer to death. 5th and 6th stanzas: He reminisces about her and mourns her. last stanza: he's preparing and about to die. That's just my guess though.