Re: a comment on Today could be the last day by cpill	cpill 85.178.255.80	13-Jul-06/2:10 AM
DAG! A typeo. I can't believe I didn't see that. If I edit I lose these comments :( Guess it stays. "Whims..." line was intended to reflect on the "People", the every day us, and how we allow ourselves to victims of circumstance. The theme, I guess, is about awareness of the moment. Awareness of life/time passing. It could be the last day for the narrator as it could be the last day for us all, and with that as the back drop to experience, even the ordinary seems crisp and alive. Thanks for your comment (and correction!), I'd not really analysed it much until now.
Re: up upon by the indign	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/8:18 PM
A nice fancy. Dreamy.
Re: Today could be the last day by cpill	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/4:28 PM
It was not the last day of your life, but could have been. But how were you to know? I believe you mean "through," not "though." "Whims . . ." is a line that be scratched, I think. Otherwise good. But I think some hint would be in order as to why the narrator thinks it could be the last day.
Re: ME AGAIN by oldschool	cpill 85.178.227.75	12-Jul-06/2:50 PM
Thats some funny sh!t
Re: a comment on The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/11:30 AM
I think there is something true and uncomplicated about writing for no reason. He seems to have learned that honor or recognition are simply not worth the trouble. At least that’s my take on his contented smile as he leans back in his chair. And besides a gay man without a rubber back cannot lean foreword that far.
Re: a comment on The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	Dovina 70.38.78.229	12-Jul-06/11:23 AM
Yes, this seems to be the majority opinion of a writer who just can’t get any attention. I think it depends on how “loser” should be defined, and whether his ten years or more of daily writing, and his compulsion to write mean something beyond the majority view. Also, if he is writing what he “knows” to be true and avoiding slick certitudes, should this raise his status, at least in some perceiving eyes?
Re: Jennifer Logan by rahson_s	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/10:21 AM
Honesty is the best policy. This is just fine the way it is.
Re: count the photos by the indign	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/10:12 AM
Edit please.
Re: a comment on of Arabia by ecargo	ecargo 167.219.88.140	12-Jul-06/9:53 AM
Interesting point. I suppose I was thinking more in terms of the romanticism of the picture than its epicness. But it is the sheer sweep and scope of it that blows me away, as much as anything. But I don't do 10 stanza poems all that often (though now I'm going to post an older long one just to make you read 30 stanzas, and then you'll likely agree that I stick to short poems for a reason (lack of attention span and lightweight drinking habits? Maybe.). Thanks for the comment/vote.
Re: a comment on of Arabia by ecargo	ecargo 167.219.88.140	12-Jul-06/9:50 AM
Excellent! I was ridiculously psyched that Chaka has a site. ;-D Chaka Khan, let me rock you Let me rock you, Chaka Khan Let me rock you, that's all I wanna do Chaka Khan, let me rock you Let me rock you, Chaka Khan Let me rock you, 'cause I feel for you Chaka Khan, won't you tell me what you wanna do Do you feel for me the way I feel for you
Re: a comment on An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/9:15 AM
I thought he was just acting British and speaking of a Lord of an estate. The other way would just make it a silly distraction.
Re: An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/9:10 AM
Would have made Poe grin.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/8:05 AM
"He scans the walls for someone who might, bends forward again— maybe tonight." -Haha, does this mean he's gay? Just Kiddin'. It's really good actually. You feel sympathetic and understand the loser's possition when you read the poem but also you still feel like he's a loser. Very nice sketch of a complex personality.
Re: of Arabia by ecargo	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/7:55 AM
Nicely written but to the epicness of the picture is lost in such a short poem. The second stanza should be stanza 10 and not 2.
Re: a comment on of Arabia by ecargo	ALChemy 209.23.202.76	12-Jul-06/7:51 AM
Actually I prefer to spell it "Chaka Khan" http://www.chakakhan.com/
Re: For My Muse by woodstock20000	amanda_dcosta 219.93.174.102	12-Jul-06/4:04 AM
I don't quite get it... It's like very vague.
Re: The Lonesome Loser by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 219.93.174.102	12-Jul-06/4:00 AM
He definitely deserves to be called a loser.
Re: a comment on of Arabia by ecargo	Ranger 86.131.57.151	12-Jul-06/12:16 AM
I assumed it was themed around the film - but I haven't watched Lawrence of Arabia since I was about 12, and as my concentration span then was about...ooh...five minutes (in the intervening time it's incresed to six minutes and forty-seven seconds) the chance of me remembering any details other than sand and camels is zero. I still feel that 'overture' isn't quite appropriate - technically correct, yes, but even so... As for 'Sheikh', well we have to spell it that way so as to discourage terrible puns about Arabs at McDonalds and strawberry sheiks.
Re: a comment on Jennifer Logan by rahson_s	Dovina 12.72.34.112	10-Jul-06/4:26 PM
If I thought you "suck" at poetry, I would not have commented. Read the good poets; see how they do it. You're not a lost cause.
Re: a comment on Jennifer Logan by rahson_s	rahson_s 208.54.95.129	10-Jul-06/11:18 AM
Thanks.. I try hard to sit down and write a "poem" some how this is what always comes of it. Once try to write a "poem" I always feel very uncomfortable with with it, as if I'm trying to write a "poem".. maybe I just suck at "poetry"... :)