| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
12-Oct-06/1:26 AM |
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Hahaha, ever get that longing to be put in a room full of sparkling wine glasses with a pair of sturdy goggles and a baseball bat? Ultra kudos for doing physics though. A friend of mine tried to teach me quantum physics; we ended up attempting to devise a whole new theory of gravity.
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
12-Oct-06/1:23 AM |
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If we can't talk like old chums on poemeranker, where can we? He's in Michigan, I'm in Wales. And besides, it's true about the emos. It'd be more fun to replace them with emus.
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| Re: my memories by fiefofum |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
12-Oct-06/1:20 AM |
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Intriguing time capsule thoughts. Couple of typos.
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| Re: October by A_Dark_Calm |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
12-Oct-06/1:17 AM |
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Sweet, very sweet. I'd like to see the rhythm you start with continued all the way through - some of the shorter lines in particular disrupt the way it runs. The end of stanza one is to die for ('a day has passed and left me 30/more before she's back at home' works wonders). Perhaps you could trim a few occasions of 'love' here and there - by the time I got to the end, the word had lost a lot of its impact through the repetitions.
Still a lovely, lovely read :-)
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| Re: Old Friend by drnick |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
12-Oct-06/1:12 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
Lola 195.229.242.86 |
12-Oct-06/12:34 AM |
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Why, yes. Believe in what you write and you'll find that your writing impresses you before it does others.
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
12-Oct-06/12:31 AM |
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Way too much homework, and I want to demonstrate to one physics professor the physics behind a particular two-body collision: my fist and his jaw. I need to break something...
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
drnick 24.176.22.254 |
12-Oct-06/12:27 AM |
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Your nagging is in violation of Men's Rule No. 1
and f.y.i. i'm not talking to any females anymore because all of you are life-sucking, abscent-minded, whimsical, love-cleavers...AND ITS ALWAYS ABOUT YOU ISNT IT?! YES, YOU'RE ALL QUITE PLEASED WITH YOURSEVES BUT THAT'S NOT ENOUGH, NO. YOU MUST PARASITE YOUR WAY THROUGH THE POPULUS CLAIMING ANY SPARK OF POTENTIAL YOU FIND IN ORDER TO FULFILL YOUR INSATIABLE THIRST FOR RUINING EVERYTHING!!!!
...eheh, got a little carried away there.
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| Re: a comment on To My Love by Lola |
Lola 195.229.242.86 |
12-Oct-06/12:26 AM |
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| Re: a comment on To My Love by Lola |
Lola 195.229.242.86 |
12-Oct-06/12:13 AM |
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Thanks drnick. I get what you're trying to tell me. I appreciate it.
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| Re: a comment on To My Love by Lola |
Lola 195.229.242.86 |
12-Oct-06/12:11 AM |
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No promises means 'I won't promise to love him the way he wants me to'.... but all the same I will love him with a never ending love..'my way'.
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| Re: a comment on Soy Flat White with One by helenwales |
helenwales 202.148.234.53 |
11-Oct-06/11:03 PM |
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I live in this really awful share house...
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| Re: Soy Flat White with One by helenwales |
piedle 218.214.77.187 |
11-Oct-06/10:17 PM |
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| Re: He Cares So Little About His Self by Hostileintent |
piedle 218.214.77.187 |
11-Oct-06/9:56 PM |
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slightly melodramatic - bits and pieces really 'work' though.
Don't listen to helenwales, she writes for post 2000 Vanilla Ice.
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| Re: forest morning by fiefofum |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/7:11 PM |
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an unusual and interesting form, not quite working yet.
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| Re: Figid Rrigid by Hostileintent |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/7:07 PM |
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Form aside, (what does it matter?)it's a good observation, but what does "punctual" and "newer" have to do with it?
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/7:04 PM |
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Chummy guy talk is in violation of Poemranker Rule No. 789576895867
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| Re: a comment on Dead Inside by drnick |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/7:03 PM |
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I like it, and I like grammar. Have at it.
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| Re: a comment on Timing by Dovina |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/7:00 PM |
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Yes, I think there are parts of the world still in the Middle Ages. Maybe they still consider women possessions, not quite human, of value as cows and horses are. I think these woman would have fewer children if they could decide on the issue, and the world would be a better place. What do you think of the estimate of 9 billion people by the yeat 2050?
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| Re: a comment on Timing by Dovina |
Dovina 17.255.240.138 |
11-Oct-06/6:56 PM |
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