| Re: Friday's Monday's June by Enkidu |
Dovina 208.127.90.253 |
15-Feb-07/7:16 AM |
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Friday's Monday's June takes a while to parse and makes a riddle out of it. The rest is quite nice in its obscurity.
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| Re: Complaints by jessicazee |
Dovina 208.127.90.253 |
15-Feb-07/7:10 AM |
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These sound like happy complaints of two who have worked hard and have some minor pains. That's just an impression though, because it isn't very clear. If "hot cocoa stains" are sweaty dirt on shirt, then good description.
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| Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina |
Dovina 208.127.90.253 |
15-Feb-07/7:01 AM |
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And thanks for seeing them as fingers.
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| Re: a comment on Captured by Dovina |
Dovina 208.127.90.253 |
15-Feb-07/6:58 AM |
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For a moment I thought of myself a lion trainer, holding a chair in one hand and a whip in the other, but quickly got off that wagon. It comes from the lion image in S2. Thanks for diluting the naughty reactions above with ânicey-nice.â
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| Re: Captured by Dovina |
jessicazee 24.160.240.140 |
15-Feb-07/6:25 AM |
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2nd stanza made me all nicey-nice. Also, what is a "trainer's chair?"
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| Re: a comment on Yet more woe by Stephen Robins |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
15-Feb-07/12:46 AM |
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Yet another failure in the long history of what will in time come to be known as "The Dovina Parodies (failures)".
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| Re: Topography by MacFrantic |
Dovina 208.127.90.123 |
14-Feb-07/9:39 AM |
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"Beauty belongs in the distraction" Nice line.
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| Re: Yet more woe by Stephen Robins |
Dovina 208.127.90.123 |
14-Feb-07/9:36 AM |
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Nothing compounds the shame of having erupted from ordinary gay teacherhood into temporary statutory rape more than the condescending cooing of a delightfully plump cockney poeme. As you lick your fingers, a poor man on his way to an important assignation, you must find a way of cleansing your trousers whilst bewailing lack of moral rectitude and vowing never again to take the short cut through shambles where the temptation of speedy relief from a brazen young wench is all too enticing. 10 (parody? - yes)
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| Re: To my Valentine by Lola |
Dovina 208.127.90.123 |
14-Feb-07/9:17 AM |
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Very touching, you two, but hardly of general interest. Enjoy your love.
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| Re: a comment on To my Valentine by Lola |
Lola 61.17.22.217 |
14-Feb-07/6:50 AM |
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| Re: To my Valentine by Lola |
A_Dark_Calm 71.68.46.177 |
14-Feb-07/6:49 AM |
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| Re: Yet more woe by Stephen Robins |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
14-Feb-07/4:55 AM |
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| Re: Yet more woe by Stephen Robins |
Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199 |
14-Feb-07/4:53 AM |
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| Re: Romantic dreams by John Rambo |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.229.135 |
13-Feb-07/12:03 PM |
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Puerile garbage and not very grammatcal either. I am shocked at this as others of your poems have suggestd at somethng approaching genius. That "alley" one was a fucking winner. This: 1/10 and only 'cos I'm feeling friendly.
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| Re: Fisting and Wishing by John Rambo |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.229.135 |
13-Feb-07/12:02 PM |
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I liked the "freshly shaven" bit. It's things like that which separated the sheep from the, er, other sheep.
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| Re: The First Date by John Rambo |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.229.135 |
13-Feb-07/12:01 PM |
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| Re: OI! The Brown Flame by SupremeDreamer |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.229.135 |
13-Feb-07/11:58 AM |
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| Re: The Ballad of Rakesh Rajani, Court Reporter by Rakesh Rajani |
Edna Sweetlove 85.210.229.135 |
13-Feb-07/11:56 AM |
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I think we all know who wrote this. Not as good as Allenby. You're on a downward slope.
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| Re: Captured by Dovina |
some deleted user 64.140.228.165 |
13-Feb-07/6:20 AM |
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A good job of interweaving the images of roughness and softness--a nice write D.
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| Re: The Medium of Dunce by Ranger |
some deleted user 64.140.228.165 |
13-Feb-07/6:06 AM |
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This is really good Ranger--one of the better posts I've seen in a while. I love the rhyme scheme--it's smooth and unforced; an excelent piece of writing.
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