Re: a comment on Fourty Caliber Thirty Pack by drnick	drnick 24.247.158.152	21-Jun-07/10:35 PM
Perhaps I'm pessimistic(ha), but this is truely how I view/feel my life right now. However, I have always been self-loathing. Thanks.
Re: a comment on Resume by drnick	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:31 PM
What's GHB? I bet it's not what I was thinking.
Re: Fourty Caliber Thirty Pack by drnick	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:28 PM
very vivid - I'm betting this is a truthful account. You have twisted some interesting lines. Nice work.
Re: a comment on Just Another Reason by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:24 PM
Wrote this after a conversation with some parents about life/lessons/growing and developing a healthy adult. The weary looks and pouting faces were directed at me, because I didn't just nod and agree with them and how wonderful they were as parents. I have the philosophy of letting kids make the little mistakes, get the small bumps, and disappointments so they can handle the bigger injuries and injustices life deals them later. Let them learn to be wise.
Re: a comment on Just Another Reason by Skamper	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:18 PM
I have four kids - 3 teen girls and a pre-teen boy. This is mainly directed at horrible parents, who mean well but suck at the job.
Re: Foie Gras by Christof	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:14 PM
All capitol letters should be demoted immediately, and only given the right to become bigger when requested. Don't be so lazy as to let Word write your lines for you! This is the third or fourth poem I've come across today with idleness stamped all over it. Switch to notepad, take back control...OK that said this is fabulous, loving it. A little jumpy but still full marks for writing with substance.
Re: Within myself waiting for a call by jessicazee	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:04 PM
Are you sitting cross-legged? For the first few words are very vague as to their meaning - we all have ankles, what is it yours are doing?
Re: Better Things by EAger to Offend	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/4:00 PM
Not bad at all.
Re: Dismissing Contentment by Something_Else	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/3:57 PM
This is one of those writes that makes me sigh - so under-dramatic. Nicely done. Just one thing find another word for intimidates - a variation of it used already in the first stanza, it's too big a word for double use.
Re: In the circle of agonies… by Prince of Void	Skamper 202.6.129.150	21-Jun-07/3:54 PM
Get rid of all the punctuation - use the ends of lines as the break points and throw way those capitol letters. Agony is a fairly powerful word, but using it too often in the one write (even though it is about agony) robs it of the impact. This has almost the reclusive feel one who lives in pain constantly.
Re: Just Another Reason by Skamper	lmp 141.154.134.3	21-Jun-07/3:19 PM
interesting. i think i know what you are driving at, how some parents will overbearingly protect their children from their environment and not just in a healthy way. the weary look and pouting face suggest that there is a bit of resentment from the parent about being a parent. then, the audacious grasp at comisery with you; they made their choice(s), right?
Re: a comment on husk [hai-crete] by lmp	lmp 141.154.134.3	21-Jun-07/3:12 PM
thank you. i guess that means even more if the poem style generally irritates you.
Re: a comment on The One I Threw Back by drnick	Dovina 69.92.217.120	21-Jun-07/3:11 PM
God made man in His own image and woman to be his helpmeet. I'm sure you were recalling that Scripture and seeing it worked out in her face.
Re: a comment on husk [hai-crete] by lmp	Dovina 69.92.217.120	21-Jun-07/3:04 PM
By that standard, crushed should be crshd, crushing out some letters. And empty, well, should be a blank space. Anyway, it's a fun thing.
Re: a comment on You can't send love to a voicemail. by drnick	lmp 141.154.134.3	21-Jun-07/2:55 PM
now that's funny. beginning to sound a lot like the opening cartton for that classic film: "better off dead". i can almost hear john cusak's voice when i read your reply above.
Re: You can't send love to a voicemail. by drnick	lmp 141.154.134.3	21-Jun-07/2:54 PM
grown up version of a pimple? seriously though, this is better written than that. think it's time for this person to start leaving excessively long messages with a lot of long silent pauses, heavy sighs, and cheery "talk to you later!"s at the end. oh, and if the message gets cut off for length, call back and continue. fill up her box [one way or another].
Re: Fourty Caliber Thirty Pack by drnick	lmp 141.154.134.3	21-Jun-07/2:49 PM
hopefully, this is not a true account. the sense of self-loathing and despair comes across very strongly. well done.
Re: a comment on grim task by lmp	Christof 86.133.189.95	21-Jun-07/2:46 PM
By 'our most pompus novelists' I was referring to British novelists - I was comparing Brits to de Lillo and and Lewis. But as I said, there's no pomposity monopoly on either side. I don't know where 'lorry' comes from, but it's definitely different to a truck. A truck is smaller and cuter.
Re: Better Things by EAger to Offend	drnick 24.247.158.152	21-Jun-07/1:58 PM
Wouldn't this be considered a prose? Either way, pretty good stuff.
Re: husk [hai-crete] by lmp	drnick 24.247.158.152	21-Jun-07/1:54 PM
I usually hate this type of poem, but you did an excellent job!