Dovina
on Poetry translation(M. Tsvetayeva) by Olya
22 Jan 2005, 1:44 PM
Some very strange language this. Too many lines don't make sense.
Better than most of the pop lyrics I hear. I'd like it get into the kinda mood of "Bridge Over Troubled Waters" a little more though.
Dovina
on Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer
22 Jan 2005, 1:36 PM
Well, as long as you write about and don't do it that's good. It happens I am a woman and my tits do sag, but ya know what, I wear a bra and stand erect and go about as if I had something worthwhile to do besides write and write about sadness.
Is Shakespeare your tutor? I don't like most of his sonets and I don't like this, even if it is hard to write.
Oh, for God's sake get over it! Have another drink. Write another poem. Go for a walk. Do something! This sitting around feeling sorry for yourself, well it's selfish and wrong. If I were on the stool next to you I'd buy you a drink.
yep, still in die Deutschland, writing shitty web applications for big corporations. I'm even starting to speak a little german these days. 'n you? still teaching poetry?
You're about as noncomformist as my ass when I sit on a (very hard) chair.
Sometimes it makes rumbling grumbling noises but we all know it's conforming, as always, to the shape of the chair. That's its purpose. It's an ass.
I like the cow pies turning ripe in the rain and their smell in the wind, a fresh, good smell. I've had my own private thunderstorm and liked it very much.
He's just trying out his new role as "poemranker hardass". He gave himself away saying any literary magazine would look twice at this.
Welcome back "schmalzy weltschmerz" is good. Are you still in Deutschland?
You fakey archaic writing is the single most godawful thing about poemranker. Great work!!!!!
Hey! Good save!!!!!!!! -0-
I love how the first thing you did on joining the site was go to the worst poems list and comment on how bad all the poems are. No one can object to you that way, right?
Wrong. fatmansinging chose that title simply because it encapsulates the feeling of the rest of his poem, like everybody else does.
quendavisti. vide!
quendo
quendamus
quendas
quendatis
quendat
quendant
quendavi
quendavimus
quendavisti
quendavistis
quendavit
quendaverunt
quendaveram
quendaveramus
quendaveras
quendaveratis
quendaverat
quendaverant
quendavero
quendaverimus
quendaveris
quendaveritis
quendaverit
quendaverint
Shut up, please. And bother to spell "starring" correctly.
Hows can you even consider this to be free verse. More like "other", or perhaps, Caged Verse. Either way, I thought it was crap. But eh? What do I know.
very good, very good.. Don't know what you did to the dreamer there, but I found the poem delightful, so whould he if he wasn't in a bad mood.. 10 of course
Certainly not a zero - and I don't know what you did to piss off supremedreamer.
This has moments of very nice poetry, but then it starts and fits into almost a Caricature of poetry.
Notch it back a bit and give the thing some focus.
Shuushin
on Homophobic Self-Help Poem. (For the men who drive a mustang) by SupremeDreamer
21 Jan 2005, 9:12 PM
Beautiful first stanza, my friend.
S5, also very good.
I can't quite talk myself into the tone of it somehow though.