Not loving the poem so much, but I like the title a lot. So, *7*.

so good, very nice picture. *9*

Reminds me of...oh, whats that thing from church...about forgiving those who trespass....I don;t know....been a long time. Anyway, I think that this was a "I need something to post poem (sorry, not trying to be mean). I just know what you're capable of and I expect more. You know I got much love for ya. ;)

definitely needs a line that stands out. *7*

Man, that was such an entertaining poem! Little changes here and there-I won't be specific- and it's perfect! *10* Can you put a single stanza in your "favorites" section?

Oh, please get rid of L4. *7*

Interesting venture. The structure could use some work. *6*

Why not just call it "The Name of the Rose" *5*

I can't believe I'm saying this, but if this had actually been a prose poem, I might have given it a higher score. And don't use "evermore" ever or more. *8*

3 dot.coms send the message. *4*

Only major problem- other than the whole "prose" thing-is the large space near the end. Find some way to fix it. *7* (I automatically deduct 1 point for prose, sorry)

wonderful, absolutely wonderful! almost a favorite. *10*

well it's original, but that's about it

A lot of vague attempts at imagery here that are not developed. Some seem there only for rhyme and rhythm. The cadance is good, but I miss finding any strong point to it all.

A tender expression of love. The king James English is a nice touch, but several places, I believe the grammar is wrong. Line 1 - "doth" is spelled "doeth", but should be "do" in the plural, or just leave it out. Other lines similar. "shalt" should be "shall" after an I. "surely thou doth knowest" -> surely thou knowest "inspiring my soul to happily moan" - good line.

I didn't read it back in '03, but this edit is intense. I'd take the parens away from "mine" and the "a" from "ferocity," otherwise great.

Aint nothin' so good as luve! A few too many words, I think. Here's what I'd do: Line 5 - scratch "One that has" Line 6 - scratch "being on" Line 8 - scatch "within" and change "cause" to "'cause"