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Frozen (Free verse) by Mona Lisa Beneath my veil of skin I freeze,
As his coarse palms roughly fondle me,
His breath smells of liquor,
And I feel his cracked lips kiss my breast.
He wants to assert his power through sex,
Thatâs his weakness (and mine)
I grasp the corners of the duvet,
As if it was my childhood Care Bear,
He grabs my face with a ferocity,
So he can watch my eyes moist with pleasure,
Soon he will cry once I canât take anymore,
And he will sleep through my insomnia.
He wont let me clean myself,
Says I am insinuating his uncleanliness.
So I will seek refuge,
Away from his hands,
Soon I will be thawed,
Free as sea strands.
Up the ladder:
Scarlet Bridge
Down the ladder:
Trichomanic Sexless Bitch
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: May 8, 2003 2:22 AM PDT; Last modified: February 11, 2005 8:57 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6685 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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8-May-03/2:18 PM
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Not bad at all.
WoW! i liked it....it was great.
good poem
'He wants to assert his power through sex,' is not needed as the poem communicates this fine.
Yes, very nice. You did a great job of showing how the narrator wasn't allowing herself to be just a victim of his somewhat abusive sex. Powerful.
Lovely.
I didn't read it back in '03, but this edit is intense. I'd take the parens away from "mine" and the "a" from "ferocity," otherwise great.
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