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Scarlet Bridge (Lyric) by marvelis
Holding hands we often walked, Smiling together we always talked. Heaven was truly around the corner. For us love was never a foreigner. But the winds of change blew, Betrayal occurred; it was you. You brought me to Scarlet Bridge Just so our lives you could abridge. Through one push of the knife into my back You attempted to take all our years back. Over my body and over the bridge you walked, Your gun of betrayal and cold blood both cocked. But you forgot, memories are meant to last. The challenge of time they are meant to test. Spilled blood only added a memory, In the process it reshaped our history. You may have put your heart to infinate rest. Rest assured final judgement will be passed. Yesterday you tried to end my life; Into my back you wedged your knife. But that was then and this is a new day. The deceitful are always made to pay. You will pay for your deceit. You will feel my pain times two. Revange is always sweet, And once,long ago, so were you.

Up the ladder: Before The Miscarriage.
Down the ladder: Frozen

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6681
Posted: April 26, 2003 11:27 AM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2003 11:27 AM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 | 26-Apr-03/11:37 AM | Reply
Great use of "talked" to rhyme with "walked" and "abridge" to rhyme with... "bridge". I especially enjoyed "Betrayal occurred". Are you a pro?
[n/a] Fear of Garbage @ 64.56.115.31 | 26-Apr-03/1:44 PM | Reply
wow. it souds like you're just doing this for the hell of a rhyme. a very bad rhyme.
[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 26-Apr-03/3:39 PM | Reply
You forgot a period, and spelled revenge wrong. Unless you are a pirate then it's Arghgggg REvanGE is mine me harty!
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