| Re: HATE by forsaken'sbigbro |
Sasha 128.135.194.81 |
15-Nov-07/2:54 PM |
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Pitiful
Voting on your own poems.
Insecurity is sooooo hot. OMG ur like a starving artist ZOMG
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| Re: a comment on Stroke It! by Skamper |
Skamper 58.171.213.42 |
15-Nov-07/1:48 PM |
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| Re: It's about truckin' by INTRANSIT |
Dovina 75.82.99.11 |
15-Nov-07/7:58 AM |
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Good. Sounds real, as if you actually believe it. "having" in verse 2 sounds weak.
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| Re: AKA Poets by Skamper |
Dovina 75.82.99.11 |
15-Nov-07/7:54 AM |
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This sounds vaguely familiar. Maybe it is adapted from Billy Collins as the 18-wheeling poet suggests. Haven't time to look. If not, you get an unabashed 10.
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| Re: AKA Poets by Skamper |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
14-Nov-07/6:00 AM |
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Yes. Who AM I to call mysef a poet. I'm sure I shouldn't be writing. According to Billy Collins at least.
Temerity-perfect.
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| Re: Collective Soul by sliver |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
12-Nov-07/7:27 PM |
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Poets.org. Watch the video. Look up the book. Get back to me. Good to see you again. Join us or you will be assimilated.
what the hell?
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| Re: It's about truckin' by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
12-Nov-07/7:01 PM |
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Meh. Just edited for better sound.
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| Re: Who's on First? by Melanie Jade |
sliver 209.248.123.223 |
12-Nov-07/6:23 PM |
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Sound like you got a good batch of l.s.d.
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| Re: Turning British by INTRANSIT |
sliver 209.248.123.223 |
12-Nov-07/6:13 PM |
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What's next? Irish pub slush?
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| Re: INTELLIGENCIA by INTRANSIT |
sliver 209.248.123.223 |
12-Nov-07/6:09 PM |
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As we think ourselves into a mellenial grave eh?
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| Re: Some poems by INTRANSIT |
sliver 209.248.123.223 |
12-Nov-07/6:00 PM |
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Well done INTRANSIT, Well done. I can certainly relate to the I.C.U. part. Another well deserved ten for you. I haven't been around for a while but if time permits I'll read a few more of yours.
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| Re: INTELLIGENCIA by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
12-Nov-07/5:14 PM |
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I can't see your comment, Mage. The counter is off.
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| Re: a comment on Some poems by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
11-Nov-07/6:18 PM |
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Thank you. Credit Skamper for the final adjustments.
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| Re: INTELLIGENCIA by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
11-Nov-07/8:11 AM |
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And line 8 needs more help. Bleh.
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| Re: INTELLIGENCIA by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
11-Nov-07/8:06 AM |
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So I dropped the Ibex and some of the punctuation, cut some excess words so I hope it reads better, at least.
But what I need to persue is that opening line.
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| Re: Winter Moon by Musicman |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
11-Nov-07/3:02 AM |
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The musicality of this poem is wonderful--you definitely are the Musicman. Great work.
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| Re: Voice of the World by Dovina |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
11-Nov-07/2:53 AM |
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Don't knock yourself for not writing good political poems--a writer as good as you will find a way--just be prepared for the backlash of idiot comments. I like this poem--the message is loud and clear. Maybe a few metaphors or similes might help? Just a thought--good work all the same.
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| Re: Stroke It! by Skamper |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
11-Nov-07/2:33 AM |
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I like EVERYTHING about this poem from your use of enjambment to the title--the title rocks!
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| Re: Some poems by INTRANSIT |
some deleted user 63.127.193.79 |
11-Nov-07/2:20 AM |
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This is good INTRANSIT. Something any good writer should be able to relate to. The rhythm seems fine to me. Nice work.
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| Re: a comment on Turning British by INTRANSIT |
INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197 |
10-Nov-07/6:19 PM |
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