Time to move on.

I'm sure you miss her very much. At least you got to say goodby.

I like this i can picture what you are saying 9/10

crass nomenclature,wow you are such a wordy gimp.

Jimmy,maybe write about what you know,instead of this sad little fantasy of jerking off a man in uniform. It seems clear you know nothing of war or love(or writing a decent poem).Oh and your music sucks as well.

I'm not sure exactly what's going on here, but I like the imagery.

superb, well done. I like how you refer to the heroes in the train more directly now

Can you e-mail me the original so I can see the steps you took to revise?

Entertaining.

I set out to write that perfect poem once also. It must not have done it, she's gone.

You write poems that sound like Yoda, or I should say, like Yoda sounds, poems you write.

From the dark tunnel...a raindrop was felt? I like the last couplet, and the raindrops.

Was this written at a fish&chips ? The image here is ridiculous.

Excellent.

Nice image. Do yuo ever try playing around with the words?

This poem suffers from verbal dysenteria. Take two aspirins and shoot me in the morning.

Fucking great. I'm shocked. Get rid of 'by someone'.

Also it should be 'my ability' not 'and ability'. "I hope there is no question" You don't need 'THAT' in the sentence. "The happiness I am sure I have never known'.(Why is evryone in love with the word THAT? My son stopped making THAT mistake at age 7). I especially like the last line because you say I could fall in love, when you already have.

Get out more.

Better the first time.