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You and I (Free verse) by Lifeboatman
Who would've thought that in the heart of this building Which accomodates a thousand people's desire, We would meet each other with a laughter and a tear You, the virgin mind incarnate And I, the ostentatious fool And how long had it been since we last met: A few days, a week, countless moments? And still you bestow on me that familiar smile Given only to those whose familiarity you had accepted And I bask in affection that can never be pretended I enjoy you amidst these displays of interaction And inspite of the crowd's doting steps and busy talks, I can still hear the forebearance of that pent-up sigh And that jump in your throat when you are amused I hope you are amused at me. I hope I am that laughter But I fear for you when you are not with me How much arrogance the world is feeding you I am afraid of the rashness of your inexperienced mind, Scared of imparting wisdom too late I fear for me when I am not with you How easy it is to lose you these days An ephemeral sunset just long enough for a quick glimpse And with an embrace, a smile and some tears, we part You, the virgin mind incarnate And I, at last, your father

Up the ladder: The Dark
Down the ladder: I do... Not!

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5667
Posted: June 13, 2004 10:53 PM PDT; Last modified: June 14, 2004 12:14 AM PDT
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Comments:
[0] god'swife @ 4.232.69.69 | 14-Jun-04/7:49 PM | Reply
This poem suffers from verbal dysenteria. Take two aspirins and shoot me in the morning.
[10] versus_u @ 210.23.113.193 | 24-Jun-04/12:14 AM | Reply
this piece seemed to me that all the bitterness has escaped you, my friend. be grateful for a love that has blossomed. i'm happy for you..
[n/a] Lifeboatman @ 203.215.86.95 > versus_u | 16-Sep-04/9:49 PM | Reply
thanks.. someone noticed..
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