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The Stickmen of Fools (Free verse) by embersandenvelopes
Like signal bars above the heads, words and phrases are listed instead From minds who only contemplate a pixel of beige, who pounce on adjectives, then suffocate. A collection of quick letters is often revered while complete processes must then be feared. If an ear is cut off, then handed as truth, the paint is declared faulty and products of youth. The brush that is bloody is only bloody and brutal- there's no integrity in man's crude tools. But the gallery will be bright with the stickmen of Fools, words repeating above heads, thinking they're cruel.

Up the ladder: Lunacy
Down the ladder: Sustained

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.8333335
Overall Rank: 1624
Posted: June 14, 2004 10:07 AM PDT; Last modified: June 14, 2004 10:07 AM PDT
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[8] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 | 14-Jun-04/10:12 AM | Reply
Reads fairly well - not entirely sure what it's about though. Feels like a venting somehow.

I like this idea of pouncing on something then the pouncer suffocating.
[7] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.159.205.193 | 14-Jun-04/10:53 AM | Reply
ATT GSM, Grrrrrrrrrrrrr.
[10] zodiac @ 65.161.41.48 | 14-Jun-04/11:28 AM | Reply
Instead of bothering with such "layered", "multi-faceted" and "biting" "observations" on poemranker commenters, you'd do better to simply say we're all "hopeless gay introverts and onanists."

Just an idea!
[n/a] embersandenvelopes @ 24.152.192.113 > zodiac | 14-Jun-04/10:06 PM | Reply
haha, well, I don't happen to think that at all. I just got tired of watching everyone throw the word "guff" around.
[9] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 14-Jun-04/2:07 PM | Reply
I'm not sure exactly what's going on here, but I like the imagery.
[1] god'swife @ 4.232.69.69 | 14-Jun-04/8:21 PM | Reply
Nice user name, but this poem is sadly magniloquent.
[n/a] deleted user @ 81.178.202.250 | 4-Sep-04/4:04 PM | Reply
VIOLETSUEDE ALERT. VIOLETSUEDE ALERT. VIOLET SUEDE ALERT.
[7] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 | 3-Jan-06/2:47 PM | Reply
sounds like a reaction to a visual art installation at a museum. you know, the ones that are technology-based with scrolling signs and all, in contrast with the more "classic" painting art form. my overall impression is that you don't think to highly of the "newer"-style art, no? 7 for interesting sentiment.
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