Dan garcia-Black
on Sugared Giraffes by Venus
4 Aug 2004, 7:54 AM
Curiously evocative.
Nice re-write.
A colossal disappointment, apparently.
Worthy of a dice toss at least
*12* wait...*2*...wait *8*
Enlightening indeed, however vague. *8*
Whenever I think of prose poem my train of thought just sto...
Short enough and quite unlike anything I've read for the past ten minutes, so *7*
John Williams has an Oscar your work reminds me of his...
If Pinnochio had tear ducts he would weep and if I wasn't so lazy I'd rant. *5*
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My guess?
An anagram of Zahagl. *No Vote*
If I had a kid like you, there is no doubt in my mind that I would drown you before you learned to write. *1*
An E for effort *E*
Response to P.S.: I am amused but all I cared about was the "static star" and the last line. *7*
I'm not slutty at all... I mean... except for that one time when... here's your goddamn vote *6*
You're down two cents for that? Oh well, I would have put at least half of it into Viacom stock. *7*
I, in turn believe that the last line is fitting and I'd love to have you on my show. *9*
Please please please take out "the" in the last line and it is truly a remarkable piece. *9.755*
Goddamn you for not sucking, I want to mock someone this morning.
I liked the not sorry part, I liked the whole thing, but the end changed it to being just a "my life is so horrible" poem into something else, it could be the horrible life poem with a twist if you view the person in this poem as so out of their mind that their sorry doesn't matter, because they can't apologize for something they have no control over.
So it's some kind of last grasp at control, a failed one.