Sounds like a keeper Dan.

Maybe you should find a different motel?

I have enjoyed this immensly, and you danced around many of the edges I walk in life. Well written, well thought out. Definite-10-

I would have to agree w/ Dovina, The crappy title makes me expect a crappy poem, You have a good image here, but you need to knead it a little more.

Yea, umm, no. kinda lost it somewhere around the third stanza, or was it the first?

What is wang zhenghui?

Some men can. Be careful who you drink with!!!

Fishy.

I quite liked this, nice scheme, nice thoughts. S2L4 would become a perfect rhyme if you wrote it as "Leaving behind only empty regret" you don't need to say it is your regret that follows naturally enough.

I think a little rhythm and rhyme here would have been most appropraite and would have enhanced the humour.

There is a good start here but it is rough, the rhythm falters and crashes often. You are a fan of Blake's Tyger Tyger I suspect, but perhaps I am wrong. Anyway this needs editorial work. As an example try inverting the order of lines 1 and 2

I also think a better title, or more clarification in the poem would be in order.

Further more you have not really said anything new, which means you have to say it in a memorable way to make your effort worth while, communication and especially poetry is not just ideas in words, but ideas/feelings in words that are well used, shaped and polished like a gem until they shine.

how wonderful. thank you

It seems hand in hand we fall through our hopes and fears. This gave me shivers

i think you're good. does someone hate you a lot or what. i noticed a lot of anonymous "0s". and a lot of your poems are on the worst page. o.O

she should have payed after putting you through that torture. wooo.

yea, poets really do find beauty in the smallest things

potential is the word.

ummmmm