Abso-fuckin-lutely!

A disconnected flow that can only mean love. And maybe to polish it up for her would be a turn-off.

You lose me on the last two lines. Before that I see a flood and a canal with a barge on it and wonder how a stonemason belongs here.

What a perfect way to die. Nice.

If the goal was to confuse your reader, then congratulations, you've done it. This could be about Ice-Cream or a person. Either way, things that confuse me are good because that means that someone has managed to write something that I can't understand. And I like to think I understand bunches of oats, so for that. -8-

this's a nice poem

Says it very well. -10- The lack of a space after the period might be a device to create a sense of urgency. I'd like to see it used uniformly if that's what it's for. Anyway you look at it -10-.

So many ways to interpret this. I can't help feeling it's a "mea cupla" in the christian sense of giving your screwed up life to god (If I didn't have this suspicion it would be a -10-.If it's about something real like a m/f relationship, it gets an extra point. For now -9-.

Don't know why I like it. Evocative?

I should vote 1 in retaliation, butI rather like this.

Ooh. This made me feel something. Good :)

True.

now i understood why i loves your poems

sized or seized? Either way. Good job.

very good poem..i love this poem

Yea, I stopped putting spaces after he walked in the room on purpose. Good eye, Garcia :) About the drive-way thing, that was me being stupid in Typoville. But! Being that I also reside in Lazeonia, it will go unchanged. But thank you for bringing it to my attention.

Yeah!

I wrote this about a friend of mine who we'll call "Jack". Jack and his girlfriend as so messed up and so I wrote this not exactly for him, but about him. Having screwy friends is inspiration in a hand basket.

This reminds me of a person I know's relationship. He should really read this.

Permanently? Eyes caress his coat. Sad.