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Daddy (Other) by LintyWeenis I can feel my stomach start to churn with a fire only he can bring. As I
see the car pull in the drive-way, I wonder if I can lock myself away
forever. You turn the key, I feel so sick. My family asks me if I'm okay.
He walks into the room. I tell them I'm fine.He looks at me first,
sending another flame up my throat.When he gets done eating, he comes to
my room.
It's so cold.
It's always so cold.
Up the ladder:
Buddy
Down the ladder:
It's lonely at the top
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Posted: September 11, 2004 5:38 PM PDT; Last modified: September 11, 2004 5:38 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.1 Overall Rank: 1141 Comments:
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LintyWeenis @ 152.163.101.10
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I decided to re-post this poem since it was being accused of self-voting. So here we go again.
Ouch!
I do ask that if you vote for this poem, that you leave some commentary. Not cowardly 2's, even if the poem deserves it.
Liverpool 3-0 West Brom
More Premiership photos Rafael Benitez's view Gary Megson's view Liverpool steadied their early nerves with a comfortable win that left West Brom awaiting their first league win. Steven Gerrard rounded off a slick move to open the scoring and a cool-headed Steve Finnan effort put Liverpool comfortably ahead at the break. West Brom became more involved after the break but when Luis Garcia hammered home a third, following up his own blocked shot, the points were safe. Robert Earnshaw came on for his West Brom debut but made little impact. West Brom's Martin Albrechtsen had already nearly put through his own net before Gerrard rewarded Liverpool's early pressure with the first goal. He combined with Garcia and Finnan to charge through on goal and kept his balance to shoot home from close range. That lead was nearly extended when Neil Clement's attempted clearance was cleared off his own line, and from the resulting corner Sami Hyypia went close with a header. Clement's off-target header from a Jason Koumas corner was West Brom's first meaningful effort on goal before Garcia wasted a glorious chance to double Liverpool's lead when his free header was way off target. Finnan claimed his first league goal for Liverpool to make it 2-0 when he trapped Jon Arne Riise's cross-field ball superbly and slotted home from a tight angle. Clement again went close for Albion in the dying seconds of the half but Djibril Cisse nearly made it 3-0 as Liverpool went in comfortably ahead at the break. Earnshaw came on just after half time as the visitors began to get more involved in the game, before Garcia wrapped up the points when he followed up his own blocked shot to thump home. Koumas soon tested Jerzy Dudek with a low long-range effort but with Liverpool showing no likelihood of letting their lead slip, the game was over as a serious contest. Near the end, substitute Milan Baros had strong penalty appeals waved away when West Brom captain Darren Purse brought him down on the edge of the box. And keeper Russell Hoult needed to be at his best to block Cisse's late effort as Liverpool eased to victory.
do you see what it is i done!
This is Poemranker, not Sportsranker.
Yes that's right!
I have not arseked anyone to rank sport. You can't rank comments on poemranker. Not in the proper poemranker way.
I'm with you on the pain, the cold.
Why drive-way, not driveway? If it's a rewrite, why "throat.When?"
Says it very well. -10-
The lack of a space after the period might be a device to create a sense of urgency. I'd like to see it used uniformly if that's what it's for. Anyway you look at it -10-.
Yea, I stopped putting spaces after he walked in the room on purpose. Good eye, Garcia :) About the drive-way thing, that was me being stupid in Typoville. But! Being that I also reside in Lazeonia, it will go unchanged. But thank you for bringing it to my attention.
this's a nice poem
this world is cold.
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