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Daddy

Member since 2004 · Posted 11 Sep 2004 · 12 comments

I can feel my stomach start to churn with a fire only he can bring. As I see the car pull in the drive-way, I wonder if I can lock myself away forever. You turn the key, I feel so sick. My family asks me if I'm okay.He walks into the room. I tell them I'm fine.He looks at me first, sending another flame up my throat.When he gets done eating, he comes to my room. It's so cold. It's always so cold.

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[n/a] LintyWeenis 11-Sep-04/5:38 PM Reply
I decided to re-post this poem since it was being accused of self-voting. So here we go again.
[10] T. Jonathron Remp 11-Sep-04/5:56 PM Reply
Ouch!
[n/a] LintyWeenis 11-Sep-04/6:12 PM Reply
I do ask that if you vote for this poem, that you leave some commentary. Not cowardly 2's, even if the poem deserves it.
[n/a] ==Doylum 11-Sep-04/7:09 PM Reply
Liverpool 3-0 West Brom

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Liverpool steadied their early nerves with a comfortable win that left West Brom awaiting their first league win.

Steven Gerrard rounded off a slick move to open the scoring and a cool-headed Steve Finnan effort put Liverpool comfortably ahead at the break.

West Brom became more involved after the break but when Luis Garcia hammered home a third, following up his own blocked shot, the points were safe.

Robert Earnshaw came on for his West Brom debut but made little impact.

West Brom's Martin Albrechtsen had already nearly put through his own net before Gerrard rewarded Liverpool's early pressure with the first goal.

He combined with Garcia and Finnan to charge through on goal and kept his balance to shoot home from close range.

That lead was nearly extended when Neil Clement's attempted clearance was cleared off his own line, and from the resulting corner Sami Hyypia went close with a header.

Clement's off-target header from a Jason Koumas corner was West Brom's first meaningful effort on goal before Garcia wasted a glorious chance to double Liverpool's lead when his free header was way off target.

Finnan claimed his first league goal for Liverpool to make it 2-0 when he trapped Jon Arne Riise's cross-field ball superbly and slotted home from a tight angle.

Clement again went close for Albion in the dying seconds of the half but Djibril Cisse nearly made it 3-0 as Liverpool went in comfortably ahead at the break.

Earnshaw came on just after half time as the visitors began to get more involved in the game, before Garcia wrapped up the points when he followed up his own blocked shot to thump home.

Koumas soon tested Jerzy Dudek with a low long-range effort but with Liverpool showing no likelihood of letting their lead slip, the game was over as a serious contest.

Near the end, substitute Milan Baros had strong penalty appeals waved away when West Brom captain Darren Purse brought him down on the edge of the box.

And keeper Russell Hoult needed to be at his best to block Cisse's late effort as Liverpool eased to victory.
[n/a] ==Doylum › ==Doylum 11-Sep-04/7:09 PM Reply
do you see what it is i done!
[8] Dovina › ==Doylum 12-Sep-04/9:11 AM Reply
This is Poemranker, not Sportsranker.
[n/a] ==Doylum › Dovina 20-Sep-04/10:00 AM Reply
Yes that's right!
I have not arseked anyone to rank sport.
You can't rank comments on poemranker.
Not in the proper poemranker way.
[8] Dovina 12-Sep-04/9:10 AM Reply
I'm with you on the pain, the cold.
Why drive-way, not driveway?
If it's a rewrite, why "throat.When?"
[10] Dan garcia-Black 12-Sep-04/10:09 AM Reply
Says it very well. -10-

The lack of a space after the period might be a device to create a sense of urgency. I'd like to see it used uniformly if that's what it's for. Anyway you look at it -10-.
[n/a] LintyWeenis 12-Sep-04/1:18 PM Reply
Yea, I stopped putting spaces after he walked in the room on purpose. Good eye, Garcia :) About the drive-way thing, that was me being stupid in Typoville. But! Being that I also reside in Lazeonia, it will go unchanged. But thank you for bringing it to my attention.
[9] Prince of Void 12-Sep-04/1:32 PM Reply
this's a nice poem
[8] darylchew 13-Sep-04/6:24 AM Reply
this world is cold.