Stephen Robins
on Call upon the wrath of god on ye by Imago
1 Nov 2004, 1:14 AM
This is a terrible drooping hobo stain on a brilliant white sofa.
Why offset the last line?
You are still a massive cock.
This pope gave up his robes
Celestine V didn't want to be pope and tried to retire to monastery
By Tony Staley
Compass Editor
St. Celestine V
When: 1210-1296
Where: Italy
What: Founder of an order of monks and pope
Canonized: 1313
Feast: May 19
An old saying warns: Be careful what you ask for, you might get it. St. Celestine V may have wished he had heeded that warning.
As the abbot of an order of monks, he told the College of Cardinals to stop their fighting, which had gone on for two years, and elect a new pope. If they didn't, he warned, he would call the wrath of God down upon them. So on July 5, 1294, the cardinals elected the 84-year-old abbot as the new pope.
Formula of Pious Consensus
Among the Pastors of the Saxon Churches
Entered into the Public Record at the Synod of Mediasch
22 June 1572_.
by Lucas Ungleich [aka Lukas Unglerus], 1526-1600
-:But as many as scorn the Son by their unbelief are condemned,
and the wrath of God remains upon them.
but the blame falls back on ourselves, who stubbornly resist
the divine will, and by our sins call the wrath of God and punishments upon ...
CHERUBIM AND SERAPHIM
By Mary M. Bodie
"We emphasize the fact which is especially interesting and instructive to us, that it is not Christ alone but His people also - His Body - who will have part in the thrilling scenes of the Day of the Lord. We notice the significant fact, that the living creatures will call the wrath of God into evidence - Rev. 6."
You just proved our point three times.
'He would call the wrath of God upon them' -- NOT 'would call upon the wrath of God on them'.
'by our sins call the wrath of God and punishments upon...' NOT 'by our sins call upon the wrath of God and punishments upon...'
'the living creatures will call the wrath of God into evidence' NOT 'the living creatures will call upon the wrath of God into evidence.'
Look. Let me put it as simply as possible. You call UPON or ON something to make it do something. 'I call upon the name of God to witness my oath' or whatnot. Or you call something down on someone: 'I call hours of boring Bible-reading on all illiterate sprogs.' You can't do both.
good poem, good reminder for me, keep up the good work
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wrath:Punishment or vengeance as a manifestation of anger.
Divine retribution for sin
The line can be interpreted as.
Request the vengeance of god on those who see fit...
It's meant as an answer to "what should I do about these people. Obviously I'm barking up the wrong tree.
Below the plebs lie the I.F.A.s -
Those shabby cads who spend their days
Spouting garbled financial cliches:
They spend their evenings bumming gays.
Questions:
is the tense change confusing? does it detract?
Is it horribly garbled and difficult to decipher?
I can't think of anything else at the moment.
Is the last sentence overly complex and unwieldy?
The closest takes flight arcing in earnest.
"Oh, I know you didn't just..."
I close one eye and hunker
expecting a sudden and bleeding passenger.
I click on the four-ways and ease
to the shoulder.
The sentence structure becomes repetitive, with all the "I-verb-object"
Quite funny!!! I was pondering the implications of a
crossmember being an angry penis the other day when I was distracted by the sudden and inexplicable explosion of the bottle of penafiel I was balancing on my head. Needless to say, I never got around to listing the implications. I will return to this duty when I dot it into my pdr.
the ! is unnecessary. Sonnets don't need iambic pentameter, but generally (unless they are blank verse sonnets which yours is plainly not) each line needs to rhyme with at least one other somewhere else in the sonnet....blah blah blah. Okay you don't want to hear the formalist shit.
How about the poem has NO meter whatsoever and desparately cries for one.
Also the subject is a bit cliché
"are you with me Dr. Poo, are you really just the shadow of the man that I once knew?"
This poem was alright I guess...I'll give you a 5...
I dont know why anyone would give this poem a zero I mean, I think its pretty good. Definatly not "Worst" list material.