this stillis one of the best poems i have ever read.

You sure do a lot of grieving for those days. It's kind of sad. -10-

Could you explain the line "In their palms they hold my depth"?

You would. But why?

Hamsters have asses? i thought they only had fuzzy little.... never mind. Plenty of potential with this. Can you read more into the pattern on the sole? How/why did the pebble get wedged there. The "neck" being the head is definitely new, or is the wearer the one with the hole in their head? Throw some hips to the side.....

Boiled? But weren't those days in the valley sweet. Until the eruption, the realization of lies. Still it was sweet. Volcanic ash'll do that to an artichoke, as lies to a heart, but hey, shake off that ash, bloom, a little grayly maybe.

"layed" in the first line. And I think what we go through for a hunk is more than a hunk goes through to get layed.

No excuse. You start well.

Scratch the last line. The first 5 lines seem bulky, wordy.

AIDS

ha haa... Good one

All pennies come from Uranus

Proof a dildo can be infected with crotchilla.

I mean do you guys really all sit around with this much cum on your faces wondering who's gear stick your going to ass cram next?

Thanks for the comments so far. Actually, "get laid" & "get layed" are both correct: http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=get%20laid

Do you really want that many periods in the last 5 lines? I kind of like it, against my will.

Didja see the lawyer show where the guy killed someone and the whole reason behind the ordeal was he didn't get a date from some chick. In the meantime he became muslim (extremist) because they supposedly believe women are inferior. It was funny. And scary.

Revisiting this, I have to say I think it is brilliant. That last stanza is quite surprising and reveals a lot..,the way the cat is sucked in, in a comparatively short instant...the mushrooms growing at a completetly negligible pace. And it feels so dank. Anyway, I love it.

Quickly! Spit spot!

Yep. Done that. Not bad atol.