Dovina
on some deleted poem
20 Mar 2005, 6:55 AM
Writing a strong emotion in a way that people unfamiliar with the situation can relate to is a difficult task. I usually fail unless some burst of inspiration relates the situation and my feelings about it in a unique way - something that pulls them in, hooks them, draws up their own supressed feelings. Good try. I doubt if I could do better.
i think I did a deep scan of this the first time. This time I swam in it. angry dust. perfect. 100. again.
Surely, indeed.
Wait a minute. Surely the person you're addressing has some other praiseworthy feature besides beauty (ie, making him/her more worthy of praise than the reflection). Then it all goes downhill from there.
Hey, welcome to poemranker! You don't need to post explanations for your poems. Seriously.
1) Are you on The O.C.?
2) Are you reading The Da Vinci Code?
You should travel back in time 15 years and start a grunge band.
Great, YOUR ancestors probably lived in Spain more recently than hers did.
Do you really need (bread) after "rye" and "possibilities" after infomercial. You did say it's a little poem. Thoughts turn rye is good. Why not infomercials piclke?
good to hear you won't be needing that viagra regimen afterall.
I liked it better before, but still good.
Can we have some of you happy athiests speak out in rebuttal?
its really sincere, but you need to check over your work for missing words and such before submitting.
hello this is the person who you commented on about eat what you want. first of all, this may be the worst poem i have ever read in my entire life. you should try wrestling instead. oh, and your name is gay. thanks! i gave you a 0. hahahahahaha
Yahhh, Vee believes in nuhsink, Lebowski.
You sink vee are kidding und making mit da funny schtuff?
Do you mean that you could care less, or that you couldn't care less? If it is the former, why not say, "I could care more?"
Have you really been looking?
Do you think it is possible for one to be an atheist, and believe in something? Please think about what the word "atheist" means prior to answering. Thank you.
What is an aethiest? Does it have anything to do with aether?
Do you think you have been hard pressed, or have you actually been hard pressed? How could you not be sure?
It's a pity that you could care less, as that proves (as does the poeme, really) that you do care at least a little.
What is it with all these idiots who use that stupidly bastardised form of a perfectly sensible phrase to accidentally express precisely the opposite of what they actually mean? Especially putative poets, who ought to have at least a little sensitivity to language?