Excellent retort. Your open expressions really come through without the use of grammar - It has certainly altered the way I view poetry. -9-

Sorry I have never rated any of your poems I am just at work when I am on the net. Nice feel although not a dastic subject, plus how can I say anything bad to someone who has offered nothing but support. Keep up the good work and get in contact with me about publishing books as this is a dream of mine. Love the style

Don't worry, I personally volunteer to have a fuck when you're gone. Hey -- one excuse to have a fuck is as good as another.

To be a critter in that wintry face-muff

I liked it a lot at the end of stanza 2. Seems like everything after that needs to be tightened up a bit.

Do you ever want to pull your cock out in public? This is the poem for you: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=94210

I didn't like this. Maybe it's some of the grammer issues, or maybe it's just the underlying tone. I'm sure you've heard of something known as slam poetry, right? I think that's where you should have focused the energy that went into this. I do like the fighting spirit this displays however. Hold onto that, this place gets to be battleground over some of the dumbest reasons. I was most put off by the "stop if you are judging as you scum destroy". This is a ranking site. You will be judged. I can't honestly vote this higher than a 4. Because if a poem is a machine, then it's what it does for us that we are rating. This moved me little. The comments were actually more interesting. <3 Jason

Ug! I feel like I've just read chapter two of a pretenious novel, written by a big fish from the pond, discovering that there are bigger and meaner fish shortly after finding his way into the lake. My vote is a -8-, just for "I'me". Otherwise, it'd be a five. I think you could develop a knack for writting, if instead of focusing on pissing off your worst critics, You instead tried to improve upon the whatever weakness they start attacking. <3 Jason

Well wrote. The first two lines were my favorites.

"What exactly would you say, If for no reason at all I spat full in your face?" In every scenario, I'd return the favor, save the death one, because well, I'd be dead. I think the last verse needs rethought entirely. The ending left me sourly disappointed. I thought you'd quite a large nut sack, until the last two lines in which apparently you spunked like never before, and lost them. -8-, but I think a rewrite of the entire last verse would make this better. <3 Jason

Peter Pan Logic only works for children. -5-

"Of every line, every anlge, every beam and bolt" Angle perhaps? Dovina's right, but I think there was some wonderful craftmanship here. I loved the Wife bit, but I think it's too easy to skip over the subtle comparison of how he was more exact with his work, than his love life. <3 Jason -10-

Bravo. Could do with another proof read, but still good stuff in my book. Pun not intended. -9- <3 Jason

Looks like a textbook example from chem. 101, and almost as boring. "(kicking him in the balls)" is the only saving grace. -6-

I knew it - this poem is way too subversive, even for poemranker. Hence the 5 it was given (which is the most deceptively subversive ranking of them all). Screw you guys, I'm giving myself a 10.

This poem is utterly illogical. Bush actually says it better, and that's saying a lot.

I would use another word instead of "dolorous". Or drop it altogether.

And no offense intended - really - but it seems like instead of posting a half-dozen mediocre poems at the same time, you could use your two-day limit to REALLY work on ONE of them, maybe the best one, and make it something more than mediocre.

People like you.

You're probably wondering why you really got such low votes on this one. I'd say it's because you start with a bad assumption ("If all it takes for fairies to be real...") that no one really believes anyway, and then apply it in a kind of backwards way to God (since the fairies bit you copped from Peter Pan was CREATED TO BE a metaphor for childlike beliefs in general, especially belief in God), then you just kind of jump to the bumper-sticker bit at the end. Besides that one, sort of faulty, idea, there's nothing really to make this poetry, no originality of expression or imagery. Please don't get me wrong. I like you and want to see you stick around and improve. Don't be offended.