Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	15-Apr-05/6:18 AM
Excellent retort. Your open expressions really come through without the use of grammar - It has certainly altered the way I view poetry. -9-
regarding some deleted poem...	Damien 212.248.252.234	15-Apr-05/7:35 AM
Sorry I have never rated any of your poems I am just at work when I am on the net. Nice feel although not a dastic subject, plus how can I say anything bad to someone who has offered nothing but support. Keep up the good work and get in contact with me about publishing books as this is a dream of mine. Love the style
Re: Suicide I by disturbedone182	Goad 213.61.217.3	15-Apr-05/8:35 AM
Don't worry, I personally volunteer to have a fuck when you're gone. Hey -- one excuse to have a fuck is as good as another.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 24.224.192.56	15-Apr-05/9:11 AM
To be a critter in that wintry face-muff
Re: Trying to get signed? by Damien	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:19 AM
I didn't like this. Maybe it's some of the grammer issues, or maybe it's just the underlying tone. I'm sure you've heard of something known as slam poetry, right? I think that's where you should have focused the energy that went into this. I do like the fighting spirit this displays however. Hold onto that, this place gets to be battleground over some of the dumbest reasons. I was most put off by the "stop if you are judging as you scum destroy". This is a ranking site. You will be judged. I can't honestly vote this higher than a 4. Because if a poem is a machine, then it's what it does for us that we are rating. This moved me little. The comments were actually more interesting. <3 Jason
Re: 15 Minute poem by Damien	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:33 AM
Ug! I feel like I've just read chapter two of a pretenious novel, written by a big fish from the pond, discovering that there are bigger and meaner fish shortly after finding his way into the lake. My vote is a -8-, just for "I'me". Otherwise, it'd be a five. I think you could develop a knack for writting, if instead of focusing on pissing off your worst critics, You instead tried to improve upon the whatever weakness they start attacking. <3 Jason
Re: The Incubation by oneglove	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:37 AM
Well wrote. The first two lines were my favorites.
Re: Spit Factor by [mojo]	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:49 AM
"What exactly would you say, If for no reason at all I spat full in your face?" In every scenario, I'd return the favor, save the death one, because well, I'd be dead. I think the last verse needs rethought entirely. The ending left me sourly disappointed. I thought you'd quite a large nut sack, until the last two lines in which apparently you spunked like never before, and lost them. -8-, but I think a rewrite of the entire last verse would make this better. <3 Jason
Re: believing by whispern_smoke_wisp	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/9:56 AM
Peter Pan Logic only works for children. -5-
Re: Looking Over the Blueprints by somemorepoetry	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:04 AM
"Of every line, every anlge, every beam and bolt" Angle perhaps? Dovina's right, but I think there was some wonderful craftmanship here. I loved the Wife bit, but I think it's too easy to skip over the subtle comparison of how he was more exact with his work, than his love life. <3 Jason -10-
Re: a conversation by crooked_smile	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:11 AM
Bravo. Could do with another proof read, but still good stuff in my book. Pun not intended. -9- <3 Jason
Re: Dancing by not_a_philosopher	thepinkbunnyofdoom 4.224.24.230	15-Apr-05/10:19 AM
Looks like a textbook example from chem. 101, and almost as boring. "(kicking him in the balls)" is the only saving grace. -6-
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 69.194.110.163	15-Apr-05/2:18 PM
I knew it - this poem is way too subversive, even for poemranker. Hence the 5 it was given (which is the most deceptively subversive ranking of them all). Screw you guys, I'm giving myself a 10.
Re: Looking Over the Blueprints by somemorepoetry	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:53 PM
I liked it a lot at the end of stanza 2. Seems like everything after that needs to be tightened up a bit.
Re: Spit Factor by [mojo]	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:55 PM
Do you ever want to pull your cock out in public? This is the poem for you: http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=94210
Re: Requiem for Faith by James Rykelangeli	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/10:58 PM
I would use another word instead of "dolorous". Or drop it altogether.
Re: believing by whispern_smoke_wisp	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/11:04 PM
You're probably wondering why you really got such low votes on this one. I'd say it's because you start with a bad assumption ("If all it takes for fairies to be real...") that no one really believes anyway, and then apply it in a kind of backwards way to God (since the fairies bit you copped from Peter Pan was CREATED TO BE a metaphor for childlike beliefs in general, especially belief in God), then you just kind of jump to the bumper-sticker bit at the end. Besides that one, sort of faulty, idea, there's nothing really to make this poetry, no originality of expression or imagery. Please don't get me wrong. I like you and want to see you stick around and improve. Don't be offended.
Re: believing by whispern_smoke_wisp	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/11:05 PM
And no offense intended - really - but it seems like instead of posting a half-dozen mediocre poems at the same time, you could use your two-day limit to REALLY work on ONE of them, maybe the best one, and make it something more than mediocre.
Re: wonder by the_poetess	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/11:06 PM
People like you.
Re: Freedom by shadows	zodiac 212.118.19.111	15-Apr-05/11:09 PM
This poem is utterly illogical. Bush actually says it better, and that's saying a lot.