Re: a way to pass time by unknown^user	zodiac 212.118.19.111	7-May-05/4:56 AM
This is good. Don't listen to Dovina. Like she'd know.
Re: a way to pass time by unknown^user	Dovina 69.175.32.185	7-May-05/6:40 AM
He says its good because you've written about him, his world, no longer listening, indefinite, but still real. Hey, this really is good. I've raised my vote.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	7-May-05/6:43 AM
Scratch the first 4 lines and put a comma after "ago"
Re: Fate by Fayt	Dovina 69.175.32.185	7-May-05/6:47 AM
If this is true, you can do anything you want because it is not you making the choice, and nobody is responsible.
Re: Go now if you want it. by Fayt	Dovina 69.175.32.185	7-May-05/6:55 AM
"Faith in the face of light" is the basis of all such hocus-pocus. I hope you mean this as satire.
Re: Strings by Fayt	Dovina 69.175.32.185	7-May-05/1:31 PM
Please stop recycling old poems under a new username.
Re: Old Friend by Dovina	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	8-May-05/8:58 AM
Interesting. Starting out with a playful rhyme and then it gets all serious. I don't think it does the pet justice, though. do it again.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	8-May-05/9:03 AM
Initially , I think the last stanza can be better. I'll be home in about 6 days. I'll come back to it.
Re: Panama by Dovina	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	8-May-05/9:09 AM
dAAmnit girl! Um, this isn't people , is it? I can't wait to get home whee i'll have time to THINK!
regarding some deleted poem...	Alizarin_Crimson 24.250.22.18	8-May-05/10:12 AM
Love the use of rhyme with laughin and splashing. I like the latter half, and the beginning. THe middle falls short, I think, of the overall message.
Re: Finding Gin and Santa by richa	richa 81.178.233.122	8-May-05/12:44 PM
Dear Mr Nentwined. Can poemranker spell seance properly?
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-May-05/4:21 PM
Dan, where I come from (a tiny website in an even tinier country) we abhorr lines that begin with capitals, especially when there is continuity in the lines...anyway, I think the first stanza is good enough to be a poem on its own, period. And I would remove the dots after 'what I must do now', they are not necessary.
Re: Old Friend by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	8-May-05/4:41 PM
I like this a lot, for its simplicity and sincerity. It's the 'cannot' that hurts somehow. It hurts the poem, is what I mean...
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/10:44 PM
Hi, welcome to poemranker. This isn't a bad poem, just a couple of nitpicks, really. For one, there's an extra space between I'm and back in the first line - don't know why. For another, all poetry on poemranker is legally (but kind of sloppily Americanly) copyrighted by the poster as of the most recent update, so you don't need to include copyright information at the end of your poem. In fact, I think it's decreed somewhere around here that you don't. Lastly, as an American (and living abroad) it bugs me how Europeans write the same poems about America over and over. This poem could be ripped off a Blur album. And besides, most Americans don't even know who Calamatiy Jane and Rock Hudson are anymore. If you want to know what we Americans' current cultural touchpoint is, it's: Europeans. Would you consider writing something about them? Maybe something along the lines of http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=124362 or http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=114724
Re: Maybe my answer is maybe by Prince of Void	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/10:47 PM
I don't understand. So your way of living life to its fullest is to avoid even the possibility of giving a real answer?
Re: Dying breed by INTRANSIT	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/10:52 PM
Really great. I think you mean "Broken", not "Boken", but I could be wrong. Also, "country's" instead of "countrys". Have you read E. Annie Proulx's short story "Brokeback Mountain"? It offers an interesting theory as to why cowboys are a dying breed.
Re: Agoraphobia in a Secret Garden by darylchew	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/11:01 PM
Drop the word "Secret" from the title. The Garden of Eden isn't exactly secret, especially considering the earth's entire human population at the time knew about it.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/11:04 PM
Is this another poem about America? Man, you're remarkably up on our current events - or, no, wait. You're not. And anyway, isn't your part of Europe responsible for both "Nogger Black" and "Negerkuss" ice cream bars?
Re: Strings by Fayt	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/11:10 PM
1) Why have you added this poem to your favorites list? 2) This is absurd. Simply absurd. 3) And as far as "an idea beyond any other" goes - well, it's not. There've been lots of silly people covering this ground before you, and better.
Re: Old Friend by Dovina	zodiac 212.118.19.234	8-May-05/11:12 PM
The first two lines are straight from crystal lane swift. The rest is good.