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Agoraphobia in a Secret Garden (Free verse) by darylchew
In a secret house of saintly roots, immersed in the bath of immortality, there he lay; perfect one. With the soft glow of the warm sunlight reflected in his eyes, a young curiosity; the first of our kind. Peering out of the frosted glass as desire peers out of his jaded heart, a heart constricted, on the verge of implosion. Guided by his inner devil towards the sacred apple of Truth, trembling hands; would they fail him? Or would he commit the ultimate betrayal, of foolish trust placed so keen? Towards humanity.

Down the ladder: I must

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6777
Posted: May 3, 2005 2:29 PM PDT; Last modified: May 8, 2005 8:03 AM PDT
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[10] zodiac @ 212.118.19.234 | 8-May-05/11:01 PM | Reply
Drop the word "Secret" from the title. The Garden of Eden isn't exactly secret, especially considering the earth's entire human population at the time knew about it.
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