Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/9:26 AM
The nostalgia greys out under all this summing up.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/9:34 AM
The list is a punishment for the reader. But the last four lines are so wonderfully effective.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	24-May-05/10:33 AM
Not great, but saved by the ending.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:35 AM
Somewhere in Jamaica, mon, an ebony hand strokes a poinciana pod. He likely has a voodoo doll, but harms it little for folks in America, regretting their music mixes with so much self abuse.
Re: Ungrateful by Damien_	Bluemonkey 170.141.68.99	24-May-05/10:45 AM
"I am Ungrateful, Ungratefully.... That's simply fucking awful, man.
Re: The Jesus Belt by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:49 AM
Good. Just a few take-it-or-leave-its: "and belief turned lies"? "A father's seed"? "made to bleed"?
Re: Kerri & Terri by jessicazee	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/10:55 AM
"skim layers of skin" - that lava soap did that. Didn't know you lived next door.
Re: MTV's The Real World: Poemranker by Bluemonkey	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:14 AM
Wish I could do that.
Re: Semite to Semite by PodPoet	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:26 AM
You should set off the refrain some way, indented perhaps, Maybe call this a lyric. Most of this is good, but "worship" goes too far.
Re: Untitled by camperdfl	Dovina 69.175.32.185	24-May-05/11:29 AM
Yes, sweet retribution. Kill him, that'll fix the matter.
Re: As the Flowers Bloom by nothingtoanyone	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/1:13 PM
A *9* for daring to be original
Re: MTV's The Real World: Allpoetry.com by Bluemonkey	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/1:17 PM
You may suck, as long as you spit out something decent
regarding some deleted poem...	dannydttn 68.100.117.180	24-May-05/1:46 PM
thanks for giving me a zero MOFO that was my first poem and try to look up FOUND POEMs on google http://www.google.com/search?num=20&;hl=en&lr=&safe=off&client=firefox-a&rls=org.mozilla%3Aen-US%3Aofficial&q=found+poem&btnG=Search fucker
Re: Never Ending Cycle by ingwa	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	24-May-05/3:25 PM
This is an improvement over your other nature poems. It rambles here and there, like 'never ending' twice, well, I tried to change one into 'eternal' but it doesn't work and you've used 'eternity' already elsewhere. The best poems about neverendings and eternities are in fact those that do not use these words... << white-topped and rolling >> white topped and rolling. The problem with English is that it has many combiwords that call for a hyphen and they are quite ugly in poems. Nice last line.
Re: Just a perfect day (Haiku) by ingwa	nentwined 64.60.192.130	24-May-05/4:27 PM
doesn't work for me. I get the concept, but the flow stumbles.
Re: Rock of the Earth by ingwa	nentwined 64.60.192.130	24-May-05/4:28 PM
"gone by" repetition hurts; I lose the rhythm in "Let me know your experience", and there's not much non-generic to pull my interest fuerther.
Re: Never Ending Cycle by ingwa	nentwined 64.60.192.130	24-May-05/4:33 PM
toped->topped, I presume? surfers -> surfer's, maybe swimmers -> swimmer's, definitely still frame -> still-frame ... I think you might have an elegant image here, between the shredded lines. Still, it's somewhat generic; hard to rub a pearl out of it.
regarding some deleted poem...	nentwined 68.232.253.181	24-May-05/6:52 PM
cute idea; doesn't work as a poem for me. You could probably get this published somewhere, regardless.
Re: Where was god? by little_big_nose	nentwined 68.232.253.181	24-May-05/6:52 PM
pimple :/
Re: To Step Aside And See You Smile by LovingWhispers	nentwined 68.232.253.181	24-May-05/6:53 PM
dense, hasn't really said anything by the sixth line that makes me want to read on...