Re: Captian, Doctor..Father by celticskatermatt1	Everyone 213.186.178.93	2-Jun-05/4:36 AM
Please consider making the following revisions: standing => squatting, basking => bisqueing, buttons => buttocks, Captain, Doctor... Father => Master, Doctor?... Father?
Re: Fair Warning by cockmage	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/5:29 AM
Script kiddies are today's ultimate brats. You would be surprised to know how many are over age. Like this one; an online coward and a failure in bed, as the words disclose. "...Ernie! You're not downloading bathing young boys again, do you? Now hurry, or we'll miss mass!" "Yes dear, I'm cummin', dear."
Re: Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines by zodiac	al-naafiysh 204.215.33.89	2-Jun-05/6:00 AM
Zo I love this poem. I love the change of heart, I knew there was another side of you that was senitive
Re: Captian, Doctor..Father by celticskatermatt1	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:07 PM
nice poem
regarding some deleted poem...	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:08 PM
very harsh...u shud b a rapper
Re: Where I'm From by lil_evil_boi	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:10 PM
well ritten...
Re: Best Friends by lil_evil_boi	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:12 PM
funny coment there.....neways./..the poems..gud
regarding some deleted poem...	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:13 PM
nice discriptive poem.....enjoyed reading it
Re: Where I'm From by lil_evil_boi	Dovina 69.175.32.185	2-Jun-05/12:20 PM
If you'd just made a list, it would say as much, and as little.
Re: I thank God that he sent you to me by KezzY20	shrutikay 219.65.91.171	2-Jun-05/12:27 PM
submit this poem to sum online wedding site..they mite feature it in their journal..
Re: Adibe's Song (third-time's-the-charm revision, less Spanish) by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.185	2-Jun-05/12:45 PM
Not knowing language or culture, I'd say she knotted her scarf, but can't see what she makes of it all.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	2-Jun-05/12:56 PM
It starts out a good Penticost description, but the tongues of fire were there. And 5 weeks later, is that Verse 3?
Re: Thanks again by Everyone	celticskatermatt1 68.8.219.196	2-Jun-05/3:34 PM
this poem sucks balls but thanks for the rating u gave mine...u fucking whore...my poem was about my dad but i see that u dont even appretiat a simple poem out of tribute....
Re: Wanted by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	2-Jun-05/3:44 PM
Too much was cut. the other only needed some adJUSTAMENTE. Um, I'll leave my piddle on the other one later . Gotta run, sorry.
Re: A Poem of Nonsense by woodstock20000	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/4:02 PM
I would prefer: 'of pink, mahogany and blue'; lubricates the reading. << Forlorn - a dark reality I fall... >> is a line that truly jars. If you really want to keep it (I guess you do) at least try to add two beats to the first line in this stanza to restore balance
Re: faster by shrutikay	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/4:05 PM
<< Speeding . ..you cant stay sublime Wallow ..n u did urself a crime >> If this spelling is te represent modern art or new experimentalism, it's wasted on me.
Re: deliberate by shrutikay	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/4:18 PM
Slightly better than the rest, but << …. >> is totally unnecessary.
Re: Wanted by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/4:25 PM
Yes, If this is a corrective or alternative of 'Swoon', I miss the man behind you. Here he seems to have become no different from the City Hall and that's a pity. I guess stanza 3 is the best part.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	2-Jun-05/4:31 PM
Too much dry facts, that can't have been your intention. But for that reason the cynism at the end turns out weak.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.185	2-Jun-05/5:23 PM
I’m listening for the trigger sign. Nope, don’t hear it today, maybe tomorrow. Meanwhile, I’m displeased with “Iraq over two years.” I mean what if it were 1 or 20, the important thing is to say 2, not two – symmetry with 1700, or, er, 17,000. No stick with two and seventeen hundred, it’s prosaic that way, not that killer math.