some deleted user
on My back (An explanation) by Stephen Robins
1 Jun 2005, 7:21 AM
Metrics, um, jiggle a bit...
This is the best poem to have appeared on Poemranker since "The Huntsman's Secret".
Yours &c.
Henry Trumpington-Pigg
P.S. As you may have noticed, rockmage has a very bad case of AIDS, caused primarily by his excessive gayness.
I knew you had a modicum of talent.
What's a villanelle?
some deleted user
on Slowing - or, A Love Poem with Eggs and Short Lines by zodiac
1 Jun 2005, 5:24 AM
Closing lines:
'Don't think me a fool for this
she says
I know exactly what time it is.'
Unless you consider the two-line consistency a holy must?
'or find my lips
not fast enough. She says
don't think me a fool for this
I know exactly what time it is.'
As a pro-depressive this poem will make you feel wonderfully pooped again.
If ever a poem enforces someone's 'inabilities, self-pity, hate, weakness'; it's this one. Were I a chronic depressive poet, I would, after reading this, commit suicide on the spot. Which would make you a i-killer.
This is the sort of poetry I call 'masturbatory'. I really hate this one.
Definitely a 10. Good use of words and i fin it very powerful. Keep the good work up!!
...Looking for God, perhaps?
Or Ben Affleck?
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
1 Jun 2005, 7:10 PM
'TwentyFIRST century wails'. How time flies, on broomsticks.
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie
Say goodbye to your website hippie. Bored now, jeez you must have patience or be on more drugs than it looks! Back to my port-scans. :)
By "objects of beauty" are you referring to the piles of scrap wood nailed together on your "soon-to-be-gone" site?
Please keep the picture of his beard.
The best part was where you described heaven as "heavenly" and hell as "hellish".