zodiac
on some deleted poem
3 Aug 2005, 5:27 AM
Brilliant. Beautiful.
Chilling yet very revealing...Bethy
Sounds like an escape from the reality of Divorce...been there... Bethy
YUP!!!
Adulterous fun
morning Picaso++
"Defeat is not the end, sure w/e, farking great" <~ Outsider art
Tiny comment
Funly!
I like the flow of it, great wording too! Good Job!
It was ok... but its different, as in unique!
I like the style you put into it, it seemed you enjoyed this one! Good job!
Mr.T Your potato with words is exactly potato...potato rhythm, truely potato unique...Bravo! :)
I just heard careless whisper twice in a row on Jordanian radio and thought, I went to grad school for this.
Hi, if you want to talk the language of love and peace, I'd say stop talking about "this isn't my war but I've gotta go cause a man's gotta do his duty and kill people who are just doing their duties and so on and so on". That's what lets wars happen. Personally, I'd pack up for Canada, see what they do when they don't have any more suckers to shoot out of their cannons.
Fascinating. But I admit I am confused; too many swirling motives here. Aside from the central bread theme, I'd be happy if you were to clarify
"the order of things: a dog, a made bed,
a centerpiece, those million, no, billion lives
saved for some use I can't imagine - to trip
my hands, maybe..."
Who are these billion lives? a country? a nation? just people? not even human? who saved them and why?
Sensuous! Love it.
Maybe a less general title could help wheel it all in? *7*
The title is strategically bland and I love the broken sentence structure. Always a fan of form. *10*