Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	7-Nov-05/1:30 PM
An amusing little story. RED and brown? Does the bird have colon cancer?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	7-Nov-05/1:57 PM
What on Jupiter are you talking about?
Re: When Did You Walk Away? by TLRufener	Dovina 69.175.32.104	7-Nov-05/2:05 PM
The question always has to be asked, when exactly did a separatiion of friends really happen? It's not when one of them walks away, but sometime before, maybe a long time before the other even suspected it. "When did you walk away?" is a good question.
Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	richa 81.178.246.176	7-Nov-05/2:44 PM
Oh, you are upset because I deleted a comment. I just thought you were a rambling idiot. :(
Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	INTRANSIT 69.33.159.194	7-Nov-05/3:13 PM
wow. I'm waaaaaay off. I thought it was a litany against blacks! HA! I gotta get out more.
Re: Bluegrass Blueshield by T. Jonathron Remp	INTRANSIT 69.33.159.194	7-Nov-05/3:20 PM
What's the Johnson-wax effect, then?
Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	INTRANSIT 69.33.159.194	7-Nov-05/3:21 PM
Where's my kick on credit?
Re: the band by celticskatermatt1	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	7-Nov-05/6:10 PM
What are you, like 13?
Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	celticskatermatt1 68.8.219.40	7-Nov-05/6:18 PM
what are you like 5?
Re: the band by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 69.175.32.104	7-Nov-05/6:25 PM
I'd rather play my own tune, make it ryhm, tap its rythm, than to settle for the band. That would be real.
Re: a casting is rescued by ay deee	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	7-Nov-05/8:34 PM
Here it's poetry, at the steel mill it's a safety instruction manual. Not that bad though. Sounds like a circa 1930s setting.
regarding some deleted poem...	Bhaskaryya 202.63.190.227	7-Nov-05/9:18 PM
good imagery though the here/forever rhyme doesn't really draw me in. May be you could find an altogether better line than "then we will live forever"...that seemed a bit hackneyed. Otherwise it was nice work!
Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus	Bhaskaryya 202.63.190.227	7-Nov-05/9:19 PM
Beautiful!
Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	richa 81.178.246.176	8-Nov-05/12:05 AM
I find it interesting that when people use the written word to say bad things about black people they call it irony if they don't really mean it. I would have thought using socially unacceptable words and thoughts gives the writer a kick, a reactance against censorship. That is not really irony.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	8-Nov-05/1:51 AM
Do you even know what your poem means? If so explain if you're not afraid of causing even more criticism. Or am I being too obtuse for your highfaluting intelligence. If so by all means delete everything that ever made you look smaller than your exploding ego.
Re: I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	8-Nov-05/2:20 AM
"Roxanne! You don't have to put on the red light..." Your use of whom is pretentious and wrong. See usage note: http://dictionary.reference.com/search?q=who Some letters are missing after your apostrophes.
Re: I LOVE A PROSTITUTE by Bhaskaryya	richa 81.178.246.176	8-Nov-05/4:12 AM
Well written. Get rid of the inversion (I shall hesitate not etc) and the I'e whatever that means and the whom. You are quite the precocious talent.
Re: Sonata for Robin and Poet by Dovina	Caducus 172.212.241.153	8-Nov-05/5:06 AM
Credit where its due this is the best I've seen from you and deserves comments. I see a lot of control in this and the language form is a detraction from your usual style. In a word - graceful.
Re: To The Modern Black Standard by ALChemy	Caducus 172.212.241.153	8-Nov-05/5:08 AM
I got some ideas from this - inspiring and bar raising.
Re: The Other by Caducus	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	8-Nov-05/6:02 AM
I think you should drop "on fridays" to help the rhythm of the poem flow better. Feels like the melancholy you see in a lot of those indie films. Bed tortoise: Great image. You can really tell the wording was well thought out.