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The Other (Free verse) by Caducus
I was your bed tortoise
from every dreaded kiss.
I only felt your warmth,
when inside you
born from Smirnoff.
My flesh was like a ferry
roll on roll off.
You would say you loved me
crowning me a King
of pedestals and guilt.
You were not her
I was not me
I was never there
The other woman was.
When it was all over
your exit was impressive.
The landing light vigil
and mantelpiece memories
facing away from sight,
like the way I slept.
Eight months have passed.
Your hair is short now
you even wear low skirts.
I feel closer to you at arms length
for I am not yours
you were never mine
the other woman was.
Is.
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.2384057
Overall Rank: 4095
Posted: November 8, 2005 2:19 AM PST; Last modified: November 8, 2005 6:56 AM PST
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Feels like the melancholy you see in a lot of those indie films.
Bed tortoise: Great image.
You can really tell the wording was well thought out.
Actually I read it with my best nicholas cage voice