Re: The Gate of Heaven by TLRufener	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:13 PM
You have expressed the Christian view of heaven where the goal is to get there. May I ask why so much more of the Bible is dedicated to glorifying God than to being glorified in heaven.
Re: Seasonal Love by Bhaskaryya	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:22 PM
Nice, to put on his pillow at each season's beginning.
Re: Close To The Beginning by RawPunkGirl	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:34 PM
So few poems end well. Life should end well, why not poems. Are all poets working against what should be?
Re: Now and Memory by elderking	Dovina 69.175.32.104	14-Nov-05/5:51 PM
Good. I'd shorten the first verse to give it more power: cast upon the canvas, sketched within my past, she waits for me. Or somesuch.
Re: Math Poem 4 by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	14-Nov-05/7:59 PM
Sounds like a good place to be, Minus-Neverland. I wonder what the tree looks like; The one with the square root that is.
regarding some deleted poem...	Tintagiles 142.166.239.234	14-Nov-05/10:22 PM
I rarely write about real things, and this is proof of it, though it started as a fair description of a trip I was recently on. I freely admit that while being driven northwards, I was reading Pound's Cantos. (And believe it or not, Zodiac, I much preferred the lyrical ones to the others.)
Re: Math Poem 4 by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/12:57 AM
Take off that silly cape and stop flapping around Alpha Beta. You're not in Narnia. It's getting embarrassing to be seen with you in public.
Re: Two Mirrors by Dovina	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/2:14 AM
I just realized: Two mirrors exactly facing each other don't reflect anything.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/6:51 AM
I agree.
regarding some deleted poem...	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/6:53 AM
You were so proud of this you put your name on it twice.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:37 AM
Cute. Is vignette the right word? I mean that honestly; I don't know or have the computing power to check. I would have said epigram.
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:49 AM
Good rhyme, good rhythm, good lyricism. Nice that you've gotten those images out of the way. Now you have no excuse for using them again.
Re: Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:50 AM
A very good movie summary. I'm guessing Phenomenon?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 217.144.7.195	15-Nov-05/9:52 AM
This first stanza is the best of what you've posted here.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:01 AM
How many birds settle on a human's tree? Are they dumb?
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:06 AM
Good flow and rhythm. "sins" seems inacurate. "The future calls" seems a bad shift.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:09 AM
Whimsical and carrying less content than poetic effort.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	Dovina 69.175.32.104	15-Nov-05/11:16 AM
I believe now that you really love me. The way you would a fluffy little dog. It's touching, really. And this morning my hair looks that way. I'll release the knee from your neck now, knowing you'll not relent.
Re: After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	15-Nov-05/12:52 PM
"What is thy name?"... "but Israel shall be thy name. And he called his name Israel."
Re: not to settle for less than almost obliteration by ay deee	richa 81.178.152.186	15-Nov-05/2:28 PM
If you give the instance you should not have to state the theme, it should be obvious. Pushing too hard is not the best word choice to describe letting a fire get out of control. Put 'it' back together; the only 'it' in this poem is the fire. Strong glue to fix something that is burnt is unapt. I like the rest of it though. It has a decent spine.