cutting.

stop. and begin again. no but thre's plenty to use here. First things first. Be more sure of what you are saying. no maybes.

Man's greatest folly is that he's forgot how to think beyond language.

Question: Could a God who by most accounts is all things, including all-forgiving, really allow a soul to go to Hell for eternity?

"consumptive" is a great word, but probably not what you meant.

I liked the butcher block better, and thought it was sensible enough. This is okay, though, if it satisfies everyone else.

I find it very odd that I see you on multiple websites. And i'm not even a stalker. On another note: Line 3: I think that 'Being dressed in my best...' should be changed. Keep the idea, but change the wording so it doesn't rhyme. Because it sounds horrible. overall, though, I thought it was ok.

You know where you are? You're in the Jungle, baby. You're gonna diiiieya. Haiku by Axl Rose

Great imagery in the 3rd stanza, otherwise, I found it difficult to follow, breaking from rhyme quite often without needing to.

Nice Concept

"Imprisoned from my ribs"? I'm sure you have an explanation why you used "from" rather than "in" or "by". I'll save you the trouble. It doesn't work.

The -dying dryly in my mouth- makes me think of eating leaves. Something I have not done since I was a youth. And I did not like it then.

Line 6: 'Withstand the beat of time' seemed out of place to me... Could you explain how this ends the first stanza?

Nice stuff.

Fro the 1st stanza of Billy Collins' "Nightclub": You are so beautiful and I am a fool to be in love with you is a theme that keeps coming up in songs and poems. There seems to be no room for variation. I have never heard anyone sing I am so beautiful and you are a fool to be in love with me, even though this notion has surely crossed the minds of women and men alike. You are so beautiful, too bad you are a fool is another one you don't hear. Or, you are a fool to consider me beautiful. That one you will never hear, guaranteed.

As if you needed proof of God's existence, the first initials of the band members in ABBA (Abagail, Brian, Bjorn, and Agatha) actually spell ABBA.

Autumnal and inviting, would of given it a 10 apart from the use of the word cunning at the beggining (if appeared as if you were trying to be clever (whether you were or not))

A Right Brain cannot get this I know, but reading your poems quickens the synapses, releasing the fluids, like squeezing blood out of silicone. Never change your style, only grammar sometimes and maybe the occasional hint of logic.

The last line seems anti-theme. Being consumed and pushing don't quite go together.

Clever, really, the various ways it lands when spun.