once again my ignorance prevails...but valor and greater don't work with me...could be my british upbringing...adore the power within her being...could be because i am a leo

wow..what a great start....and then so boring and mundane...stick to the point...don't wallow in it

yawn

what is this??? have you ever read poetry?? fuck me! what are you saying...in 25 words or less please

vaccum filled pregnat hours..*sigh*...

BAHAHAHA....LOVE IT....PURE POETRY IN MOTION..OBVIOUSLY

what....WHAT....DRIVEL MY DEAR, PURE AND SIMPLE

delete all messages

I haven't had so much fun since colonic irrigation..a real movement at last

did u get a thesaurus for your b/day? congrats

if you can't describe it...then how can we imagine it...that's the work of poets...to use words...c'mon give it to me

i could eat this with a spoon...yum

Yes. Eventually, yes.

Makes me think we need youtube-style "reply-poems". HMMMM.

I think "grave" is out of place (even though I'm sure you intended that, I think it's the wrong out of place, at that point?) It's a lot of fun, a good one, but I want to trim it, slightly, find it a cadence (or a different one). Like.

Is that rockmage on the cover?

Mostly ace. May I suggest some crits? I'm going to anyway. Line 4 trips the rhythm too much - perhaps needs revising? Line 8 - get rid of 'like'. It's unnecessary and interrupts the flow. As someone's already said, 'valo(u)r' and 'greater' just don't do it. The other rhymes are perfect (flesh/creche? Fantastic!) so don't spoil it right at the end. Otherwise, like -8-

For the lulz -10-

I haven't a clue what's going on here.

Soulful poem...