| Re: Belle Melange/The Curse of Millhaven by lmp |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/4:50 AM |
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excuse my ignorance....but isn't this already a poem/ballad? as you say by nick cave? If that's the case then what it this?
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| Re: My One Regret by nypoet22 |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/4:56 AM |
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nice ...but..your breaks are off a little...
if i'd thought
i wouldn't see you again
i would not have stopped
at the elevator
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| Re: The Cat Goddess by nypoet22 |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:02 AM |
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once again my ignorance prevails...but valor and greater don't work with me...could be my british upbringing...adore the power within her being...could be because i am a leo
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| Re: Outliers by nypoet22 |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:05 AM |
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wow..what a great start....and then so boring and mundane...stick to the point...don't wallow in it
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| Re: Weather Poem 16 - Right and Wrong by nypoet22 |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:06 AM |
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| Re: I found you. by Gillon |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:10 AM |
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what is this??? have you ever read poetry?? fuck me! what are you saying...in 25 words or less please
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| Re: Thoughts by Moauram |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:12 AM |
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vaccum filled pregnat hours..*sigh*...
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| Re: Rimming by wDaphnew |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:14 AM |
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BAHAHAHA....LOVE IT....PURE POETRY IN MOTION..OBVIOUSLY
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| Re: it is my turn this season by daniella |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:17 AM |
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what....WHAT....DRIVEL MY DEAR, PURE AND SIMPLE
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| Re: Inbox by Roisin |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:18 AM |
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| Re: think_bot12@_adage by skaskowski |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:21 AM |
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I haven't had so much fun since colonic irrigation..a real movement at last
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| Re: ~Methinks~ by wDaphnew |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:23 AM |
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did u get a thesaurus for your b/day? congrats
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| Re: A dream world by alvinb |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:26 AM |
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if you can't describe it...then how can we imagine it...that's the work of poets...to use words...c'mon give it to me
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| Re: Liar by Roisin |
Skamper 124.181.76.40 |
9-Jun-12/5:33 AM |
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i could eat this with a spoon...yum
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| Re: Help! by Dovina |
Ranger 2.97.62.69 |
22-Jun-12/3:29 PM |
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| Re: Help! by Dovina |
nentwined 24.7.113.224 |
22-Jun-12/3:42 PM |
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Makes me think we need youtube-style "reply-poems". HMMMM.
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| Re: Counting by Dovina |
nentwined 24.7.113.224 |
22-Jun-12/3:49 PM |
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I think "grave" is out of place (even though I'm sure you intended that, I think it's the wrong out of place, at that point?)
It's a lot of fun, a good one, but I want to trim it, slightly, find it a cadence (or a different one).
Like.
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| Re: Max's Poems by nentwined |
Ranger 2.97.62.69 |
22-Jun-12/3:57 PM |
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Is that rockmage on the cover?
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| Re: The Cat Goddess by nypoet22 |
Ranger 2.97.62.69 |
22-Jun-12/4:11 PM |
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Mostly ace. May I suggest some crits? I'm going to anyway.
Line 4 trips the rhythm too much - perhaps needs revising?
Line 8 - get rid of 'like'. It's unnecessary and interrupts the flow.
As someone's already said, 'valo(u)r' and 'greater' just don't do it. The other rhymes are perfect (flesh/creche? Fantastic!) so don't spoil it right at the end.
Otherwise, like -8-
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| Re: Facebook Post by Skamper |
Ranger 2.97.62.69 |
22-Jun-12/4:14 PM |
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