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Liar (Free verse) by Roisin I see her howling hysterical head
flung back, shrieking, teeth exposed.
A pink, truthless tongue
protrudes
from That mouth.
Bitch.
Bent over her desk, tan leather limbs
Almost brushing hers, the sickening shadow.
My breath comes out in quick, hot puffs.
The misty window screams at my gloved touch.
His fingers snake over her left hand.
Glinting gold and diamond
Suffocated by sin.
Shaking, I squeeze the trigger.
Up the ladder:
Before Dawn
Down the ladder:
cat
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Posted: November 16, 2007 9:45 AM PST; Last modified: September 20, 2011 8:44 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.476812 Overall Rank: 2822 Comments:
In agreement with intransit - bitch needs it's own line
who gets the lead - I would like to think it's a suicide, a point made, a final thrust of guilt. Nice work, shady and direct.
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not bad
i could eat this with a spoon...yum
Wow, somebody came in the door who makes good comments, who makes any comments, who comes in the door, who exists.
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I think you can lose -glinting and move suffocated by sin up. I'd also like ahint as to who is catching the hot lead.
hope that helps.