This is cute, but not even close to as good as your first post.

Apart from how showy and verbose this poem is, it is EXTREMELY well written and re-readable.

I like the last stanza, but isn't subtle enough.

Wonderful confession from 7th grader to 7th grader. Bravo!

the first two lines are kind of useless. However, it winds down well.

ugh...not your best. if you had read this, you probably would have made it more interesting in revision. if you did read it...why didn't you delete it?

OK, so I'm doing this thing for Fawm.org where you're supposed to write 14 songs in 28 days. This is the first one and I figured I might as well post it here too. I should have a demo up at some point if anyone cares to hear it.

Hey! I have a poem with the same title. But this is totally different, and enjoyable. Well written, in fact. Loved "So I’ll just wrap myself in another cliché of cheap bourbon and unlit cigarettes." Also, S3's "your" should be "you're"

This is perfectly concise. Good suicide note.

Could be better. I'm really not a fan of this simplistic image structure that takes so many lines to say very little.

stool. *116*

Not many poems on this subject. You get Windows Vista yet , Rock?

I like this except for the middle stanza. That seems really forced to make the rhymes.

I don’t see or feel your music. Afire HUH? Almost as good as caressing your heart with a knife {your first post in, in case you don‘t remember, encased as you are in bliss}. You seem to be in love with the idea of pain.

Wow, 1? Really? People don't really take this voting thing seriously. Here's a 10 for the 8 I'm awarding. Put it in the bin next to your other rankings.

This scans excellently!!!111 And great use of "though!!" to rhyme with "head"!!!!111

This is your best post yet, a real hole slammer! Or is that slam dunker!

Sorry for the the tirade. Actually, there is some good stuff being written at poemranker but this is definitely not one of them.

this poem was inspired by the accidental death of a 20 year old potter.

Yeah, I get the first line - probably not the way you get it, but doesn't matter. Same for last line of S3. You've got some way to go before you get over saying the first line of S6.