Tasty.

A good job of interweaving the images of roughness and softness--a nice write D.

"He proved as popular at school as a quick glass of AIDS" is the greatest -=Dark_Angel=- tribute line I think I've ever seen. -10-! And for the Warhammer reference you get double AIDS. -10- -20-

THE SAGA CONTINUES...

I like it overall. The puncuation and grammar errors throw me off though. If you are going to use form to help your poem, use it to make it more readable. The form here makes it harder to read I think. Also, "with my beliefs though, I can no longer take refuge in them knowing" This sentence is grammatically incorrect. I think :)

A good write, Rockmage. It left me wanting more--another stanza might benefit this truley decent (or should I say indecent) piece of work.

This is really good Ranger--one of the better posts I've seen in a while. I love the rhyme scheme--it's smooth and unforced; an excelent piece of writing.

I think we all know who wrote this. Not as good as Allenby. You're on a downward slope.

Fucking witty. I like a good tribute poem. "Mould", not "mold" dear. Use English spelling, not ignorant Yank crap.

Fucking awful

Good lord, step away from your gramma's soft core porn. " . . . held huskily in fluted flesh . . ." LOL! How does one hold something "huskily"? (Being a "weaker vessel," I guess mah sens-a-bilities are jes' a little tendah.) I feel a little dirty, as if I should have changed my pantaloons after watchin' the big, strong stableboy shovel out the stall ('cause surely some shit was being slung). The focus on the hand is pretty good, but the rest borders on pre-sexual-emancipation bad-romance-novel cliche.

ace rhyming of pitch and six.

I stumbled over the “Not” in line 4. Omitting it makes a better read for me, but you probably have something else in mind, perhaps that she doesn’t understand the visions in the glass, but can only speak them. Also, the semicolons distract, and would better become commas for this reader. I love line 2 = 8. Well crafted.

It paints a good picture in my head. I almost think you should stay with the rhythm through the last last line. ie. 'alone in bed.'

I think you sacrafice something here trying to fit your meaning into rhyme. Nice imagery though.

The rhyimg doesn't seem to work. I also don't like the two 'ing' endings right next to each other on line 3. The last four lines, on the other hand are great. The rhyme works and the words all well put.

I tend to like more rhythm and fewer, more precise words in poetry. That being said, it is a story well told.

I don't think you need anything beyond the third line.

The rhythm needs fixing in a few places on my reading, that and a bit of punctuation tweaking. Bracket the fourth line and make it "(such a fool)".

And you never actually answered SupremeDreamer's (valid) question: what are you talking about when you say 'i tendons tear apart'?