blah - who cares about this nationalistic shite.

more drivel - well crafted, but really - why bother. it's like gold-plating dog shit.

I don't think it works putting your rhyming words on a seperate line. It makes the poem sound like Father Ted's 'my lovely horse'. Also sleep does not fill one's head.

sexy...good memory... :) Bethy

Short of sounding like a Coke or Pepsi add, There's Nothing Like The Real Thing Baby! lol, Good Good Good !!! Bethy:)

Dovina I have just soiled my brand new spats.

A true story? WOW! I think we all have gone to school with an "Andy" Sad but a good poem/story. :) Bethy

Don't you mean SWF.

It's ok. The whole little paw entices strong hand idea is relatively interesting. It's just I don't know kind of icky.

and your English teacher just laughed. :(

Good flow and driving story. No diversions – that’s good. “This is wrong” – a line that might be self-questioning, especially with your “moralistic” comment, but could mean just “ineffective methods.” It’s good to leave that open. Well done.

Why the flaming devil has no-one commented on this yet? You need to insult more people, it seems. This is a work of true vision and beauty, such devotion has rarely been seen on these light blue pages. Actually I'd quite like the metre to be played around with - the first line is oh so catchy, follow it up with a couple of short blasts and then return to a lengthier beat. You're getting a ten though and I will not give less -10-

Have at it.

also drivel.

nice!

yikes.

My vote...I wish to be very very dead; I love this...simple serious... Bethy :)

I love the word "befuddled" its how I wake up some days...usually when I can't find clean socks, or my agenda...either or...it is a real feeling... Bethy:)

God Bless Tiny...if this is what you remember at four...then so-be-it...I feel like a junky when I read your poetry...even your comments deserve ranking... :) :) :) Bethy

Wow! This is a fav...I love it when my mind goes on a brief vacation, when my eyes are closed :) Bethy