That has got to be the most amusing poo verse in a while. The cinder block bit was the icing on the "mud" pie.

Here's a joke for you: knawk knawk....

their should be they're. good use of rhythm.

You must be completely bonkers.

good, like the sinister turn at the end. Is the second line not 6 syllables though?

I can't decide whether the second line is brilliant or the most idiotic thing I've read in the last twenty-four hours.

You'll have to forgive my younger brother. He's extraordinarilly bright, but hopelessly unsophisticated. I hope this ten will please you. I really am quite fond of hawks.

"last year, my best bud was mown down," were they driving by on a John Dear?

Ooohh. Nice one, sir.

Puerilely decent until the last line.

i can't believe u used hawks.

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Well, it would have been much more interesting if you would have rhymed Pee chee with spermicid(e).

Christ almighty. Different from your usual, as was your last before this, but amazing nonetheless. they made me feel.

This poem is just a shameless cash-in on the popularity of AIDS. -0-

Do you examine your stools in the bowl? I was once having a conversation about it, and three of my friends all said they did this, and they thought I was really weird for not doing. Who is right? N.B. -10-

A fine example to any aspiring young poets. -10-

This would only be good if it was actually written by an actual gnome. -1-

you are asking the reader to believe you have no idea 'lightbulb in my head, it seems to be dead' and then expecting someone to value your poem. A small point of logic I like the rhyme gnome and poem, if you really are short as a gnome it is even better.

check the inconsistent verb tenses - devours - receding active to passive - I'm not exactly sure. but i know that recedes works better, and leaves you room for an adjective or other words in the last line.