the ending is disappointing, because the rest of it is so good.

hahahah.. that zodiac is funny.... He is not passionate enough about the matter to spend any more time on it, but plenty passionate to count up your titles that fit in the category of adj-noun??/? Unbelievable. but funny. Good poem. Also funny.

A disaster on wheels.

This is how "Kubla Khan" would sound if Coleridge had done the crack instead of the smack.

Do you know the area around Cuttingsville?

Nice.

"to[o] late"

A unfasionably tired sentiment extremely well said.

Ack. Hey - not bad for a poem of this type; one of the better ones.

Makes me wonder who begat pain and/of suffering if death begat this child described (or, as you say - you). Are your friends pain and suffering?

Why not lose the ; after "truth" and change "Then" to "Than" Still a bit clumbsy. Other than that, it's very nice.

A good theme, but could be said in half as many words, or at least more interestingly.

"To so confuse the daffodils" would be better said "That so confuses daffodils?" Otherwise, swell.

Is it heart or mind That so confuses daffodils? They twitch at first, . . . Yes, I like it. I'll do a revision, and will appreciaty your replacing your vote.

um, somebody gave this a 10 because that is where the spinning wheel of his or her mouse landed. Do you not know that all voting on this site is arbitrary??? Well, maybe not all, because apparently there are some not with the program. here's my spin....

Beautifully done. I wish that I could use simplicity so effectively. I usually just say too much.

That's nice poem.....

Maybe a line break before "Commense this stagnation" What's a girl to do? Call him! Not bad, not bad at all.

"Your hand touches my throat" leads me to sinister thoughts, but you didn't go there. A nice, dreamy love poem.

Something inconsistant about "Leaving temporary memories, but serving permanent scars" A good story, but seems too wordy.