regarding some deleted poem...	25-Oct-04/7:51 PM
an absolutely wonderful treatise on soup
Re: Lost by Sweet Cheese	25-Oct-04/7:54 PM
melancholic? sweet cheese is a good name.
Re: Women by Bakar	25-Oct-04/8:05 PM
this is a poem?
Re: Who is deserving of all my love by zodiac	26-Oct-04/4:08 AM
this is excellent. In stanza 8 perhaps you mean flinch when you write flich? or is flich a word I have never heard?
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/4:28 AM
fucking hilarious
Re: Old Friends by breeza123	26-Oct-04/4:30 AM
unspeakably daft.
Re: Withering Rose by Imago	26-Oct-04/4:44 AM
i think that the home/beauty line is the best in the poem. it makes perfect sense to me...that where beauty has made residence, it will never stay, but always move on to find new residence. Beauty does not construct, but rather make "something" her home. I think it works. whether this is true or not, I cannot exactly say, nor do I particularly care. I like the theme, and I think the language is well used in some parts, but, overall, I think you need to pull in the reins a little, as much of this feels over the top, but perhaps the "floweriness" of the language is apt after all. what the fuck would i know? anyway, i think the ending is good, if a bit overplayed and somewhat cliche.
Re: AIDS in a Glass by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	26-Oct-04/5:07 AM
shame you could not work "tars" into this somehow.
Re: Harvey the Dolphin Sucker by T. Jonathron Remp	26-Oct-04/10:54 AM
comment by Richard E. Watley just beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/10:59 AM
i like my fright well salted. This and the redundancy already pointed out aside, the mood creation is effective.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/11:28 AM
is it possible to reap what is already dead? Or would that just be collection? Great ending
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/11:30 AM
though i would suggest, "i pondered the robin's plight" "on" seems out of place and the to capitalize "Robin" makes me think of Batman. I pondered the robins' plight and we both searched for a new home.
Re: Grandma in love by Caducus	26-Oct-04/11:36 AM
a wicked and inspired jug solo
Re: Grandma in love by Caducus	26-Oct-04/11:38 AM
i would suggest "new" in place of "anew" also, "fall" in place of "falter" a 10 anyway
Re: repeated sins, repeated prayer by oneglove	27-Oct-04/5:25 AM
you are so weak. you are so inadequate.
Re: Alone by rrashi	27-Oct-04/5:28 AM
and in which orafice were you enjoying this "cone"?
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Oct-04/5:32 AM
what, or whom was this person "laying"?
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Oct-04/5:56 AM
one step forward, two steps back? Now, where have i heard THAT before?
Re: Delicate Was by klosterfobik	28-Oct-04/7:01 AM
i had intended to rank this poem on its merits, but then I read the comments. adverb indeed. -0-
Re: Ash by horus8	28-Oct-04/9:01 PM
chunky