regarding some deleted poem...	9-Dec-02/2:40 PM
What? No cock? No cunt? Just a lot of words. Where are the Mexicans when the poem needs a good trimming? And the answers to rhetorical questions are the poetry, not the question itself. That is what we ask ourselves during the writing process, which this is obviously still in. You could cut this down and make it much more effective. Say lose 8am (who cares) Japanese (who cares - if there is a contrast meant to be there it doesn't work and gets in the way of the rest of the poem. Is scavenger a bit over dramatic? There are much better images to create the concept of invisibility or media created visions. "an income of" = wordy. The points of the last three are there. Are they not silent 1) because of a language barrier and 2) many are illegal and bringing attention to themselves would jeopardize the fact that many rely heavily on these (seasonal in Denver) jobs to support families back home and that if they manage to find a way through the middle man (which is rare) with the paycheck the money translated in pesos is good. And I am not sure about the burbs of Orange County, but most make more than 30 a week out here.
Re: Missing the In-Between by <~>	9-Dec-02/2:44 PM
Good stuff all the way through and hearing it read was quite nice. Line 2, 3, 4 are top notch. One of the few poems here, along with the Chistof one about the fox, that are truly effective on another level away from the pimple shit and workshop wannabe muck.
Re: Osmosis on Parade by David	9-Dec-02/2:46 PM
So what? Well, that is about it.
Re: Dear Mr. Poetry, could you hold my purse? <how does babbit do it> by horus8	9-Dec-02/4:58 PM
This is # ten. Ten poems written in my lovely honor. Come on Bacchus. You are a pretty boy; a hit with all the ladies, do not be jealous. Just look at what the hard knock life has brought you: the talent to ramble (sometimes in decent fashion) and call it new and inspiring and saying anyone who questions the Henry Rollins style lacks depth or imagination or is not hip with the underground. The "subbacultcha." To learn to digest prison food properly. To drop names of actors that no one has ever heard of. Go find an acting job, slam the night away at the coffee shop, play your Tuesday night gigs and starve in honor the fact that you my friend are a true "artist" and me, with a wall of degrees, and a line of credit into the astrosphere earned with (yes, you guessed it) writing just doesn't "understand". There is art there. There is. Yes. Yes.
Re: Maria's ways on how to deal with puberty! by little_angel_maria	10-Dec-02/2:35 AM
Yes, but what about those nasty hairs on your tits? What about those?
Re: the shape by w~* ATHENA *~w	10-Dec-02/2:37 AM
I am sure this is stolen.
Re: alienheart by Bill Z Bub	11-Dec-02/9:46 AM
what is a pinwheel eye? And I have no idea what "i want to touch your area 51 you can be my agent Scully" but I like it. Pretty good stuff; just needs a bit of tightening.
Re: Popaul by Nicholas Jones	11-Dec-02/9:48 AM
Stupid as usual. You used to write well.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/9:56 AM
I see your friend has been here. does this disgrace you or just hit your giggle button. Or have you become a coward in the hours of your last breaths?
Re: Free by muffin	11-Dec-02/10:02 AM
Good god this is bad. "Emotion dripped off her body"? Come on. that is the worst line ever.
Re: scotty dog by rosiebailey	11-Dec-02/10:10 AM
Ha, another in the london boy gansta clan. Oh yeah, we like to fight and drink and piss in alleyways and listen to The Streets (who is actually pretty good).
Re: Coloured waifs home by horus8	11-Dec-02/10:11 AM
And you were an orphan too. Wow. the life of a hard knock.
Re: Xmas gifts list by lunar	11-Dec-02/2:45 PM
And will UPS deliver these things?
Re: Sparks, until Sunvalley. by <{Baba^Yaga}>	11-Dec-02/2:48 PM
Cut the confessional wanderings and the telling-to-much antics and focus solely on some on the better images of this poem and you may have something in the end. But I know, I know, this is really high art and I should just go fuck myself because when we are all long dead they will be studying this in schools going "why didn't anybody understand that this man was ahead of his time. The Jimi Hendrix of poetry."
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/2:49 PM
I did not miss reading your shit.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/3:13 PM
Oh my god. This is beautiful. A work of heartbreaking, staggering genius.
Re: Transformers "a higher, vaster, deeper meaning". by Bachus	11-Dec-02/9:07 PM
I suppose we need a proper form to let our past turn into nostalgia. I guess this rates up there with trying to sell T-shirts with a Tide box on it. Go figure.
Re: A hard life by INTRANSIT	11-Dec-02/9:21 PM
. Is this about horus8? "and sit staring jigging" this made me bend over with laughter. Granted the third vodka tonic helped, but this is comic genius. A work of heartbreaking staggering genius.
Re: Transformers "a higher, vaster, deeper meaning". by Bachus	11-Dec-02/9:55 PM
Did you change the title or am I drunk. Now it makes even less sense. Was that the point?
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Dec-02/11:39 PM
Eight blue votes. I wish settle and horus8 would just pull their pants down and show you their manhood already. Maybe it would cure you. At least it would save them the embarrassment of acting like flies on your shit, eh? But then again, maybe you are too far gone. Have you been drinking your juice?