Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	8-Jun-05/9:41 PM
You forget, I live on Tatooine.
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	7-Jun-05/3:15 AM
Not now that you've asked.
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	7-Jun-05/3:10 AM
It's about an abusive prophet. In other words, about as oldfashioned as you can get.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	7-Jun-05/3:05 AM
No, I just meant grammatically. In the poem, "answer" is what comes - or, rather, "come". I know the last line is a comparison. A repetition, actually (which I think more and more is what makes poetry poetry.) In truth, the comparison is implicit in the first stanza: Midwesterners think summer following rain isn't strange; since the poem's about Californians, we naturally think that Californians probably do think it's strange. It's not necessary to say so again. Particularly not for a last line. My thinking for the moment is that "or rain's __________ result" should be the last line. I've no idea what the blank should be. 'inevitable', 'unfathomable', 'stillborn', and about a dozen others I've tried don't work - exactly. Something along those lines, though, and you'll be all aces.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	7-Jun-05/2:56 AM
Do you think the shape of balls is inappropriate?
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	7-Jun-05/2:55 AM
It hasn't been a point of discussion since Simone Beauvoir and a dozen others made out what jackasses we all were for persisting in thinking the sun was male. These days, we tend to just stay indoors.
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	7-Jun-05/2:51 AM
PS-I just read an Adrienne Rich poem that used triple spacebar-hits and line-ends for punctuation. I thought you'd like to know.
Re: a comment on Dovecote by zodiac	7-Jun-05/2:47 AM
Just out of curiosity, what did you make of it?
Re: a comment on Snow by lil_evil_boi	7-Jun-05/2:37 AM
Are you insane? It's obvious you either are lil_evil_boi or a very close friend of his. Can you actually go through the day thinking 'Hey, there's somebody who really likes my poems! "Speechless", he said!' That's nuts.
Re: Carte Blanche by ALChemy	6-Jun-05/6:08 AM
Please try to not post comments explaining your poems. -10-
Re: fireflies die too by hendrimike	6-Jun-05/6:06 AM
its hope. No apostrophe.
Re: The Comedy of Mighty Rockmage: Combatting Old Age. by Don-Quixote	6-Jun-05/6:05 AM
Except for "pretends only he be humble", which is incomprehensible, the best oldey talk you've ever written.
Re: no rashes by calliope	6-Jun-05/6:03 AM
How unfortunate for you. My initials actually are B.I.C.
Re: Vote Goats by ALChemy	6-Jun-05/5:59 AM
If I told you my name is John Updike, would that make a difference? Yes, you'd say, Ha ha, more like 'Up Johndick'. Real mature. -10-
Re: a comment on Lower than low by nicole081083	6-Jun-05/5:18 AM
What exactly, as far as this life is concerned? In other words, can you think of another word to complete the sentence, "You've got to _____ just to make it today"? I can't.
Re: a comment on Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	6-Jun-05/5:17 AM
Or "The sun's red swelling balls"?
Re: Smoky Mountain High by Dovina	6-Jun-05/5:16 AM
Do you mean "comes summer's answer" or "come summer's answers"? Or is there another subject somewhere I haven't noticed? Would you consider dropping the last line? I liked it the first time, though. Really. The title made me think of both the actual Smoky Mountains, in my home part of the world, and the Rocky Mountains of the song. Neither of which are referenced in the poem. PS-I do wish you'd stop taking Shuushin's word about end-line punctuation. PPS-Very good, overall.
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	4-Jun-05/7:04 AM
Yes, once. Is that sufficient?
Re: a comment on Applicative-Order Fixed-Point Operator by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	4-Jun-05/7:00 AM
Oh. Crap. Guess I walked into that.
Re: lawngazing by skaskowski	4-Jun-05/6:50 AM
How were the bottles busted on a blanket? Not that it matters, I'm just curious.