Re: I hate you too U2 by D. $ Fontera	14-Aug-05/1:18 AM
PS-I liked the spider-in-the-ear. But any poem that uses multiple linebreaks for dramatic pauses or the passing of time is an automatic minus-2. Sorry, those are the rules.
Re: I hate you too U2 by D. $ Fontera	14-Aug-05/1:17 AM
Hey, no one's done that wordplay before!
Re: The Stinging by Mona Lisa	14-Aug-05/1:16 AM
Do you really think that what wasps are doing in their hives is, um, stinging things? Other than that, nice.
Re: Words by Dovina	14-Aug-05/1:13 AM
Is he the inventor of Shift+F7?
Re: First by Dovina	14-Aug-05/1:04 AM
Verily. -0-
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	14-Aug-05/12:40 AM
"The itchiest itch is only a shadow of some greater almighty itch" is the most illogical thing I've ever said, and I feel it to the core of my being. How ya like dem apples? You're not answering my point. CS Lewis' proof of God is the transience of earthly pleasure and his feeling that there's got to be some better pleasure out there. If you felt that earthly misery was pretty tepid overall, and you just KNEW there was some greater, higher misery out there, what would that be proof of? Um, God. My examples are exactly the same as CS, except mine make God sound kind of like a jackass, in my opinion. And this is all bum thinking (or feeling?) to begin with. For all the reasons above. To wit, there's no reason to believe a word like, say, satisfaction means 'some perfect state of well-being pretty much unattainable in earthly existence'. Your problem, if I may say so Dovina, is that you keep forgetting words are just things we made up once.
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	14-Aug-05/12:31 AM
Consider who is using it in common language. Recent immigrants, my friend, recent immigrants. Is that really the face you want to show the world? "We all got our problems" is grammatically correct, if not exactly right for the present situation. Most half-educated people I know also habitually say "Everyone has his own problems" or "We all have problems". Which are easier and just as clear, if anything. I agree with your point that "Everyone has their own problems" would be a perfectly fine thing to include in a poem written, say, in the voice of a hillbilly.
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	14-Aug-05/12:27 AM
Describe "almost omnipotent".
Re: Mirrored by MacFrantic	9-Aug-05/2:18 AM
Is the right half written in Elvish? Clever!
Re: Waiting Room by jessicazee	9-Aug-05/2:16 AM
You're currently the best writer on the site. For what it's worth. An honest-to-goodness 10.
Re: More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	9-Aug-05/2:14 AM
Everyone has whose problems? Don't you mean 'Everyone has his (or her) problems'? Or even better, 'Everyone has problems'? Sorry for being nitpicky. Notice even Dovina didn't catch it. As for the poem, I wish there was something new you could say about God. You'd think, hey He's infinte, there must be an infinite number of original things to say about Him. Funny how there isn't, huh?
Re: That Summer by XOXScottishgrlXOX	9-Aug-05/2:10 AM
I predict your life is going to be spectacularly eventful and dramatic, and not in a good way.
Re: BY ALL YOUR HEART by prettyktm	9-Aug-05/1:43 AM
The actual English expression is "With all your heart". I'm not trying to be hypercritical, that just seemed important, seeing as it's your title and all.
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	9-Aug-05/1:42 AM
Oh. Then I can rightly say, "The worst dissatisfactions on earth are lacking something"? Or "The most boring boredom on earth falls short of the ideal of boredom?" Or "The itchiest itch is only a shadow of some greater almighty itch"? Jeez, aren't we pretty lucky on the whole? Not the least for not having a God who's into extremes, or we'd have killed ourselves ages ago.
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	7-Aug-05/12:17 AM
From CS Lewis, I imagine. Other than that, from you. Probably from lines like "It seems to get further away The moment you reach out for it The moment you long for it It just scampers off". That reminds me: farther, not further.
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	7-Aug-05/12:11 AM
I think CS would have been cool with word-quibbles. Next one: The best satisfactions on earth are lacking something compared to what? Like, if my expectation was, "This activity is not only going to make me happy, but also rich and as virile as I was at seventeen," then no, pretty much no circumstance is going to fulfill that. But my circumstances make me about as happy as any human being on earth. Shouldn't that be the high endpoint of satisfaction? Like, satisfaction can't be defined as "some kind of pleasure it's impossible to feel in earthly existence" or "like orgasming all the time", or nobody could use it and it's basically a throwaway word. Do you see what I mean? Basically, my satisfactions are right in line with my expectations, so I logically cannot feel like they're lacking. Right?
Re: Writer's Block by shadows	6-Aug-05/3:32 AM
Awkward. Ironic, huh? Congratulations on being the second poem titled "Writer's Block" on poemranker this week.
Re: Sand by toward	6-Aug-05/3:29 AM
...During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you. IT WAS THEN THAT I CARRIED YOU!!!!1!!
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	6-Aug-05/3:20 AM
...In short, since I notice I didn't say it, everyone's ideal for every circumstance should be "it'll make me purely, wholesomely happy without killing a bunch of baby seals or something such."
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	6-Aug-05/3:18 AM
That's silly. That the situation is "ideal" MEANS that it's going to provide satisfaction. At least, as far as most people are concerned. Whose IDEAL of marriage (that is, whose vision of a PERFECT marriage) is misery? CS would have done better to say "people fall short of realizing their ideal circumstances" or "people make up stupid ideals, like a Porsche and a wife who makes waffles naked." Also, CS Lewis is a bint.