Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	27-Nov-05/5:41 AM
I'd like to see Dovina's Reason cast as sexy protagonist woman and Dovina's Emotion cast as the prude seductee. They end up in a flat in Brooklyn with 2.5 kids and a Hyundai. Nights when Reason's out of town, Emotion still likes to dress in women's clothes and pretend to be "Douvinae", sexy damsel of wildly romantic melodrama.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	27-Nov-05/5:36 AM
Relating the two what? Sometimes, I truly believe you're not trying to make sense. Judges' ruling: Colossally stupid.
Re: i dream in nine minute increments by ay deee	25-Nov-05/1:40 AM
"all kinds of guns waving in the air" and "explaining how my arm hurts" are really weak lines. The rest is pretty good.
Re: Derrick Holmes by rahson_s	25-Nov-05/1:36 AM
I like the style. There's a bunch of missing punctuation and randomly capitalized words, and 'addiction' is misspelled, but the half-rhymes are really cool. I kind of wish this was a little more meaningful than a book report.
Re: O dear. by celticskatermatt1	25-Nov-05/1:31 AM
I predict you're not going to care what we say about this poem. Good for you. You'll show us.
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	25-Nov-05/1:28 AM
I like the music references. What I don't like is using the worm so much. There's already a great poem with that image, you need to add something, a strong image of your own.
Re: Colorbars by wilco	25-Nov-05/1:26 AM
The best of your lyrics I've read. My only suggestions are drop 'serenade' and keep the last verse more naturalistic, like the others.
Re: The Dreamhole by cyan9	25-Nov-05/1:22 AM
This would be good by Keane doing British pop doing Radiohead.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	25-Nov-05/1:18 AM
No, on second thought, let's let it all go.
Re: a comment on A Modern Woman by Dovina	25-Nov-05/1:12 AM
Obviously I can't stop you from believing such colossal stupidity, but I'd like to suggest that you not share it with other people lest they get the idea that you're stupid and don't sleep with you.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	25-Nov-05/1:04 AM
Don't let it all go. Just let the part where you're always accusing me of classifying go.
Re: Due Consideration by Dovina	25-Nov-05/1:02 AM
Here's a perfect example: REASON: Dovina might be slightly racist. DOVINA'S BELIEFS: Nooooooooooo!
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	25-Nov-05/1:01 AM
All my decisions are based on reason. My unreasonable decisions are based on an admittedly imperfect application of reason. Guess that's the end of this conversation.
Re: A Modern Woman by Dovina	24-Nov-05/12:53 AM
She doesn't hang out at the same places you do.
Re: a comment on One Second by TLRufener	24-Nov-05/12:47 AM
That has nothing to do with it. I will comment on your poems if you promise not to delete any more comments that aren't your own.
Re: a comment on Us Sinners by BrandonW	24-Nov-05/12:44 AM
The prime example of trumping on poemranker is Mr Professor Doug Soderstrom, MA. He has never claimed to win anything, only trumped and hoped that in the resulting confusion we'd forget there was ever a discussion going on. I'm under no illusions about your desire to win. I hope that's settled. 1. Because if I do that, you say that most of what you've written/commented on poemranker doesn't reflect your real views or that it's too ambiguous to draw any real conclusion from. I'm not trying to dis; those are both excellent responses, but I'm trying to get somewhere. If you mean 'rather than just commenting on what I say, which is that I don't assume Christian God', well, because I think your a prime blunderer about those sort of things, and that people in general are not to be trusted to know their own minds. 2. Because the whole point of this argument is 'Oh, oh, shame on zodiac! He assumes God!' That is, shame on you Dovina for assuming not only God but Christian God, and then thinking it's some kind of dis to accuse others of that. Now you'll pretend the aboveposted comments and all of your other comments on this site are too vague for me to be drawing such conclusions. If that's the case, why the hell do you comment here? And do you ever suspect that you don't actually exist? Despite your constant assertions to the contrary, you have always classified me and classify me at least as much as I classify you. Besides, I'm not the one who thinks classifying is some evil injustice; you're that one. At least half of the time. Disbelieve me if you like; these are the most obvious ways you've classified me on this page alone: - God-assumer, - Classifier, - Likes to trump, - Most cares about trumping, - Will inevitably trump, - Strongly-held believer. So let it go.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	24-Nov-05/12:21 AM
I speak Arabic. All words stick in my throat. That's how we talk. But no, I never ever feel like the voice of reason is acting at odds with my instinct or preexisting beliefs, so I need to ignore or abandon one of them to make things work. I think that would be a terrible way to live. I'm sure unreasoning people think mine is a terrible way to live, but then I seem a lot less bent out of shape than a lot of them.
Re: a comment on Due Consideration by Dovina	23-Nov-05/11:35 PM
On slate.com. Just enter any of the of above in quotes on yahoo or google.
Re: a comment on Letter from Palermo by Caducus	23-Nov-05/11:31 PM
No. I'm a special education teacher in the middle of the Jordanian desert. But I did study poetry for about 7 years of college. 1) What you're lacking most is consistency to your metaphors. You often pick one aspect of an image that relates to the thing you're describing, but ignore the other aspects of it that don't relate at all. For instance, in a recent poem you called child prostitutes "painted masterpieces" when the only thing about masterpieces that resembles child prostitutes is something like "painted up to please the viewer"; all other aspects of masterpieces, like "product of hard work and creative genius, appealing on dozens of sublime and intellectual levels, painted by respectable people" totally work against what you're trying to get across about prostitutes. A corollary of this, though not as necessary, is consistency between metaphors. For example, in this poem you have things compared to rivers and zombies like, two lines apart. It's not such a crime, but ideally there'd be some kind of logic or connection between them. That's all I can do right now. I'll get back on the rest.
Re: One Second by TLRufener	22-Nov-05/3:31 AM
In one second my little brother can fit an entire Big Mac in his mouth.