Re: Winter Wonderland by raven_the_poet	14-Feb-06/12:40 PM
Surely, you can think of a better title for this than one that's already the name of a famous song.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/8:35 PM
"imagines the future like a train bearing down fast." Well, yeah. It was February. The worst of the Crash was about 8 months away.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/8:34 PM
Yeah, but he's a gangster. That's hardly what I'd call a real person. I'm pretty sure I've said this, but these are my two favorite poems of late. It's worth clicking on the link and reading both: http://www.poems.com/twopocan.htm
Re: a comment on In response to by INTRANSIT	13-Feb-06/8:32 PM
Rises where? And why? - zodiac Well, this has been fun... *whistles chuffily*
Re: a comment on In response to by INTRANSIT	13-Feb-06/6:35 PM
The highest form of morality is not to feel at home in one's own home. - Theodor Adorno
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/6:30 PM
I DID have some idea at the start that the poem was going to have something other to do with Valentine's than the date. But there are so many obstacles: for one, I drank two beers writing this, a first for me and definite no-no; for another, Valentine's Day wasn't even a holiday then, as far as I can tell, so nix on him referencing it. The truth is simply that I would like to relate it to Valentine's somehow. (This is the first of two planned parts, the second being about Cook dying in Hawaii, which also happened in Feb 14.) The easiest way I see to go about it is that Frank's the valentine to the Irish, the offering that reveals nothing. That's kind of where I see the guts-offering part going, but like I said, I was a little buzzed by that point. Any suggestions?
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/2:27 PM
Oh. I was talking about new porn, obviously. Here's a question for you and ecargo: How well-known is Gusenberg/The V-Day Massacre, anyway? How do you know about him? I have no idea what other people know about.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/2:12 PM
I'm glad the alibi girl came through.
Re: a comment on Valentine by zodiac	13-Feb-06/1:27 PM
You know, I actually don't know the New Pornographers except by name. If they are who I think they are, though, I like their work.
Re: a comment on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone	13-Feb-06/7:50 AM
Oh. Fraser didn't come off so well in that whole contest, then, did he? That's going to be hard on him, coming as it does after his legs' girth finally making it impossible for him to walk frontwards through doors, as we've all long predicted.
Re: a comment on Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	12-Feb-06/9:38 PM
My opinion isn't overrated. It's certified "Excellent" by a panel of nine international judges, highest and lowest dropped. Consider instead that you're acting like a child because someone didn't tell you what a godawful genius you are. Well - now that your ego's down to size, let's consider one of your so-called paradoxes: "We have taller buildings, but shorter tempers". This is not technically a paradox, as there's no understood or expressed connection between building-height and temper. Indeed, the opposite could be said to be true: everyone knows that walking up tall buildings makes you angry, while Aboriginals are perfectly happy in their mud hovels. But perhaps you meant "People expend a lot of energy working for something that's not an expressed priority (i.e., taller buildings), while not working very hard for something that is an expressed priority (more patience and understanding)." Well, for one, why didn't you - or whoever made that email forward list of "paradoxes of our times" - say so? And for two, it's not true. This is a time of longer tempers, as is proven by anything more than a passing glance at history. Looking through the rest of your list, I see most of those "paradoxes" fall into one or more of the following categories: (1) not technically paradoxical, (2) not true, and (3) folk pithiness; something that sounds clever to people like you because it uses "opposite words" - short/long, quick/slow, etc. - but on cursory examination deflates like guff souffle. Inasmuch as (3) is true, this should be the most profound thing you've ever heard: I am smart, but you are foolish. In short, you are not going to be able to out-sense me, neither here nor in the Thunderdome of your choice. Your "moonlight paradox" presents no paradox. Anywhere. In addition, it's misspelled, mispunctuated, rambling, focusless, and overloaded with words that, by universal agreement, should never be used in poetry again. If it helps, you can go zero all my poems now. On your way out, please considering reading some actual modern poetry somewhere. It's been swell.
Re: The Perigenetic Prayer by ALChemy	12-Feb-06/4:06 PM
How Dovina. Sorry I didn't comment earlier. I simply can't think of what else to say.
Re: Going Away to Fight a War by wilco	12-Feb-06/1:21 PM
You get better and better.
Re: Monkey Tree (Breathless edit) by ecargo	12-Feb-06/1:19 PM
"Bower" is a bad word choice. I think this is one of the few times where wild indentation helps the poem. Good one.
Re: Partying Blind by poetry/poem101	12-Feb-06/1:18 PM
What's with all the ...? Or is that braille?
Re: writer's block by Zoetrope	12-Feb-06/1:05 PM
Good, except this is probably the sixth poem called "Writer's Block" on this site. You're obviously not blocked, just need to focus each of these stanzas, perhaps, into a solid poem.
Re: The Struggling Poet's Lament by Ranger	12-Feb-06/1:02 PM
"So beautiful, that baffled moon Who watched my gentle hands - quiet" "Like lazy flies, a drunken waltz A crooked hem, a button gone And in the heavy candle glow I stumble" These are good.
Re: Moonlight Paradox by Glasseyez	12-Feb-06/12:59 PM
Paradoxes are overrated. What's more, there are no real paradoxes in life, just people who are surprised when the cliches they live their lives by don't hold up. My favorite part of this is, "does why explains what?" Yes, it do.
Re: caught amist by LaasChijld	12-Feb-06/12:49 PM
You mean "wandered". Like, "I wandered lonely as a cloud".
Re: Panic Slide by MacFrantic	12-Feb-06/12:20 PM
Make some of these thoughts stretch across the couplets.