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Free verse № 138943

Winter Wonderland

Member since 2006 · Posted 14 Feb 2006 · 5 comments

I'm rolling around in the snow. It's so pleasurable and fun To roll balls of ice. Around the man we run. He's made of snow and coal. A carrot for a nose. If he touches things, you'll need two sticks. Now he's pretty as a rose. He looks alive but he's not. The head's a bit smaller than the base. We like to dress him for winter. Around his body we race. I'm rolling around in the grass. It's so pleasurable and fun. But my snowman has melted away. And summer's on the run.

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5 comments

[n/a] Ranger 14-Feb-06/10:33 AM Reply
Sounds like something that would suit a villanelle, with a little expansion.
[8] edgar-allen-poe-rox 14-Feb-06/10:38 AM Reply
poor mr snow : (
[7] zodiac 14-Feb-06/12:40 PM Reply
Surely, you can think of a better title for this than one that's already the name of a famous song.
[n/a] raven_the_poet › zodiac 14-Feb-06/7:17 PM Reply
I wrote it a long time ago.. I dunno.. any suggestions?
[n/a] Blue Magpie 22-Feb-06/5:51 AM Reply
Light verse, such as this, is traditionally strong on rhyme and rhythm, which is what makes them stay in your head, while this has some rhyme it appears to have no rhythm at all which makes it less than it could be.