regarding some deleted poem...	8-Jun-04/7:10 AM
In all seriousness, you would do much better to make your next poem in the past tense.
Re: Isn't it a wonder by caitydee	8-Jun-04/7:16 AM
Could you please tell me how the Civil War has anything to do with Ronald Reagan? Thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	9-Jun-04/5:33 PM
The first bit is really good and reminds me of Yeats or something. Then it falls apart into crap. Then the crap starts multiplying and increasing its horrible powers. SO - - Don't ever ever write in a poem that "words can't describe" whatever the poem is about. It's a terribly stupid thing to do. - "Discribe" is "describe," anyway. - Why in God's name are you suddenly "itchin"? Why oh why would we want you to abruptly change the poem's voice to that of a backhills rustic? Don't do that! Don't even say "itching to"! It's a silly expression, utterly unpoetic, and if you do say it in real life, I'd highly recommend you stop. Thank you. - That last stanza just fizzles out altogether. It reads like a second-grader's report on "How I spent my summer vacation." You know, the ones you had to write before you learned any tenses but the present indicative. To summarize: Start writing again from the end of the first stanza. Get it together, bud! This ain't the minor leagues any more.
Re: Desire by Chasz Misleading	9-Jun-04/5:45 PM
horus8 might have written this poem about being drilled by Dean Cain while on X at a fabulous Dave Geffen pool party.
Re: untitled by Desdemona	9-Jun-04/5:46 PM
Oh dear god...
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Jun-04/10:25 AM
Bisexual Pair of Ducks (Free verse) by Jaime El-Gran-Tronchador-Chingon-Hijueputa-Jones The older We get, The more I realize We're just a couple of ducks. * * * * * * * * * * * * * Quack quack quack Quack quack Quack quack quack, Quack quack quack!
Re: 6/11/04 11:10-11:15 AM by Chasz Misleading	12-Jun-04/9:37 AM
I think you should change the title of this poem to "Stardate -319424.77". And "I wrote this poem in only X minutes" is the buncombe dodge of an inveterate guffer.
Re: Lost by arduinn	12-Jun-04/10:12 AM
What language is spoken in Singapore? Is it Malay?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-04/10:15 AM
The first stanza is tremendously overwrought. Please, at least consider sticking a real verb in there somewhere. I liked the rest. Surprised?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-04/10:17 AM
Does this kind of thing work? Please, let me know. - Desperate in Al Kerak
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Jun-04/10:20 AM
"hole" should be "whole". "drug" should be "dragged". "someplace" isn't a real word, even in the magical topsy-turvy land of Poetry.
Re: First Kiss by david	12-Jun-04/10:22 AM
Did you cop the idea of false teeth sprouting flowers from 100 Years of Solitude?
Re: sweet surrender by francis nor capule	12-Jun-04/10:26 AM
If you re-post this an infinite number of times to be read by an infinite number of retards, do you suppose you'll eventually hit on a group that doesn't mind how your title's entirely copped from Sarah Maclachlan? No, wait, I see now. You hadn't even thought of that song, you just happen to think that surrender is sweet. Bow'ls to you, francis. Bow'ls and bow'ls.
Re: Of Absinthe and Asphalt by pain killer	12-Jun-04/8:50 PM
Maybe you'll consider not changing my name so often, as it requires all of thirty seconds of purposeless effort and the soiling of several dozen cheap one-ply johnnies.
Re: The Businessman by abcmonkey78	12-Jun-04/8:51 PM
If I were a carney, I'd say you were a precious fifteen and a rube to the max.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Jun-04/4:46 PM
You should change "There must be no other place" to "I have known no other place," or something such, as it's doubtful you've visited every place on earth. As it happens, the most peaceful place on earth is my own home town in North Carolina's Great Smoky Mountains. Observe: http://tinyurl.com/2sxch http://tinyurl.com/2knlp
Re: Windfall by wilco	13-Jun-04/5:14 PM
This poem is entirely lacking in main clauses. -0-
Re: The Stickmen of Fools by embersandenvelopes	14-Jun-04/11:28 AM
Instead of bothering with such "layered", "multi-faceted" and "biting" "observations" on poemranker commenters, you'd do better to simply say we're all "hopeless gay introverts and onanists." Just an idea!
regarding some deleted poem...	14-Jun-04/12:17 PM
It might tickle you to know that in Arabic Shin Shuu means "What path?" - as famously represented in Surat 68 of the Quran: "The Day comes when the Shin shall be laid bare and the hypocrites shall be called to prostrate, but they shall not be able to do so; Their eyes will be cast down and ignominy will cover them."
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Jun-04/1:26 PM
Writing a poem where you admit your failings in writing the poem is a great idea! Cf. crystal lane swift.