replying on Little Bird by Blindpoetry
25 May 2006, 7:51 AM
If you have nothing worth reading to type, then don't "f*cking" type at all.
on disaster in the flesh by Crakyamuni
23 Dec 2005, 9:31 AM
"can you not see the death below us" seemed out of place, Crack Your Money
replying on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry
19 Dec 2005, 3:10 PM
Your sarcasm is refreshing in this world of blatant pooping.
on Returning Home by Niphredil
18 Dec 2005, 8:30 AM
might want to take an adjective or and adverd out of second stanza, line 4 - just so there isn't one line poking out like a sword, or a knife. or some other objects.
i enjoyed it
i enjoyed it
replying on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry
16 Dec 2005, 9:21 PM
no, it's blah.
And then something about your mother.
duh?
And then something about your mother.
duh?
replying on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry
16 Dec 2005, 9:21 PM
got anything else?
got anything else?? GOT ANYTHING ELSE?!?!
...yeah.
just look at the million other poems I have.
Yeah, that's something else.
got anything else?? GOT ANYTHING ELSE?!?!
...yeah.
just look at the million other poems I have.
Yeah, that's something else.
replying on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry
15 Dec 2005, 1:41 PM
I said that, too
phew
phew
replying on Blah Blah by Blindpoetry
15 Dec 2005, 11:55 AM
Just a little... :-/
I posted this as more of a 'hey I'm alive' deal. Rather than 'omfg new poem'
I posted this as more of a 'hey I'm alive' deal. Rather than 'omfg new poem'
on Close To The Beginning by RawPunkGirl
13 Nov 2005, 3:04 PM
I find it very odd that I see you on multiple websites.
And i'm not even a stalker.
On another note:
Line 3: I think that 'Being dressed in my best...' should be changed. Keep the idea, but change the wording so it doesn't rhyme. Because it sounds horrible.
overall, though, I thought it was ok.
And i'm not even a stalker.
On another note:
Line 3: I think that 'Being dressed in my best...' should be changed. Keep the idea, but change the wording so it doesn't rhyme. Because it sounds horrible.
overall, though, I thought it was ok.
replying on Mandarin Trial by cyan9
10 Nov 2005, 7:05 PM
Fourth stanza looks fine, to me. :)
About the third stanza - it just looks awkward seeing 'I lay' right above and below each other.
Maybe two different words, but both meaning some form of 'lay'?
About the third stanza - it just looks awkward seeing 'I lay' right above and below each other.
Maybe two different words, but both meaning some form of 'lay'?
on Mandarin Trial by cyan9
9 Nov 2005, 7:48 PM
It was nice.
line 6: A[n] irridescent...
third stanza looks out of place with the repeated phrase: I lay back into the sheets...
line 6: A[n] irridescent...
third stanza looks out of place with the repeated phrase: I lay back into the sheets...
on A Good Man Ruined by Dovina
17 Jul 2005, 10:43 PM
kind[of] like a poet
woot.
woot.
on the smallest box will do by elderking
14 Jul 2005, 8:14 AM
I liked this one.
Except, for being an ignorant 15yroldbrat, what's C.O.D.?
Except, for being an ignorant 15yroldbrat, what's C.O.D.?
on a conversation by crooked_smile
14 Apr 2005, 3:24 PM
obsessive yuck
on I⦠the blank paper of unsaid things by Prince of Void
14 Apr 2005, 3:07 PM
Unless my age deprives me of known knowledge, I thought that this was a very good piece.
Well, unique, anyways.
Well, unique, anyways.
replying on trully, madly, deeply by Blindpoetry
12 Apr 2005, 12:50 PM
oh fuck.
Thanks
Thanks